Dear Miss Kaur, I hope this letter finds you well. I am to express my intent to to quality control. Over the last two I have been consistent while delivering the projects and I have learnt various conflict resolution, and inventory stock verification. I have been several times. I have completed a certified quality technician course recently to . I have noticed that there is a job opening for the same post. Given a will definitely try to to the company. The company has always been cooperative with me whenever needed. It not only offers but also which motivates me to this organization in future as well. I . Ankit
Sample response & feedback
Letter to Manager Requesting Internal Department Transfer
Question
You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: • say what you have learned in your present job • suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department • explain why you do not wish to leave the company Dear ……………………,
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Overall assessment
Why this response received Band 6.5
The letter makes its transfer request clear, describes skills learned and explains why the writer wishes to stay. The proposed benefit to the company is less developed: the qualification supports suitability, but the promise to contribute remains general. A sentence fragment, lowercase pronouns and faulty determiner use reduce accuracy, while awkward word combinations sometimes weaken expression.
IELTS criteria
How each score was decided
TA Task Achievement
6.0The purpose is clear and all three bullet points are addressed, with specific learned skills and reasons for remaining at the company. However, the certification and vacancy establish suitability for transfer rather than explain a concrete company benefit; the promise to contribute remains general. The register is mostly appropriate.
CC Coherence and Cohesion
6.5Ideas follow a logical sequence from the transfer request to skills, qualifications and reasons for staying. Line breaks separate these stages, but linking is sometimes mechanical and the fragment 'Over the last two years.' interrupts the flow.
LR Lexical Resource
6.5Vocabulary shows adequate range for the purpose, with items like 'remuneration', 'conflict resolution' and 'inventory stock verification', but imprecise combinations such as 'excel my career' and 'helping working environment' limit natural expression.
GRA Grammatical Range and Accuracy
6.0A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but errors including a sentence fragment, lowercase 'i', missing determiners, and the faulty construction 'for you reply positively' reduce grammatical accuracy.