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Application Letter to Teach Children Language in Australia

Question

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You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter explain why you think you would be suitable for the job say what else you could do for the family give your reasons for wanting the job You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear …………………… ,

Annotated response

9 correction notes

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I am writing to express my keen interest in the position of teaching English to in Australia for a year. With my extensive background in language education and a deep-rooted passion for cultural exchange, I firmly believe that I possess the qualifications and enthusiasm to excel in this role.

Beyond providing high-quality English lessons tailored to the children’s needs, I could contribute to the family’s well-being in various capacities. My experience as a tutor has equipped me with strong organizational and time management skills, enabling me to assist with homework, extracurricular activities, and even light household tasks if required. Moreover, my warm personality and ability to connect with children would create a nurturing learning environment.

The prospect of immersing myself in a new culture and broadening my horizons is incredibly appealing to me. I am eager to learn about the rich Australian way of life while sharing my own cultural perspectives. Additionally, working with children brings me immense joy and fulfillment, as I find great satisfaction in witnessing their growth and development.

I am confident that my qualifications, combined with my genuine enthusiasm for this opportunity, make me an ideal candidate for this position. I eagerly await your positive response.

Warm regards,

Ravindra Kamath

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.5

The letter uses fluent, largely accurate language and covers all three requested points in a clear sequence. Its main limitation is that broad claims about qualifications and cultural interests receive little personal support. More concrete examples, a greeting addressed to both recipients and a less presumptive closing would make the application more convincing and appropriately targeted.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

TA Task Achievement

7.0

The purpose is clear and each bullet point—suitability, additional contributions and reasons for wanting the job—is covered. Relevant experience remains broadly described, while the greeting and presumed positive response could be better tailored to the couple.

CC Coherence and Cohesion

7.5

The letter is logically organized into well-managed paragraphs, with a clear progression from introduction to closing and cohesive devices used naturally throughout.

LR Lexical Resource

7.0

Vocabulary is varied and largely precise, including phrases like 'nurturing learning environment' and 'immersing myself in a new culture,' though some wording is formulaic or mildly overused.

GRA Grammatical Range and Accuracy

8.0

Complex sentences, a relative clause and participial constructions are handled with control. The main weakness in the opening is the description of the recipients of the lessons, rather than a recurring grammatical pattern.

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