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Application Letter to Teach Children Language in Australia

Question

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You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter explain why you think you would be suitable for the job say what else you could do for the family give your reasons for wanting the job You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear …………………… ,

Annotated response

8 correction notes

Dear Mr. and Mrs. Thompson,

I recently came across your advertisement seeking a tutor to teach your two children and I would love to apply for the position.

As a qualified Spanish language teacher with five years of experience, I have taught children of various ages and proficiency levels. I focus on interactive and engaging lessons that make learning enjoyable, incorporating games, storytelling, and cultural activities to keep young learners motivated. My approach children not only learn the language but also develop confidence in using it in daily conversations.

In addition to teaching, I would be happy to assist your family in other ways. I can help with homework, organise educational activities, or even introduce your children to traditional songs and stories from my culture. If needed, I am also willing to assist with light household tasks or meal preparation.

I am particularly interested in this role because I have always wanted to experience life in Australia while sharing my language and culture with others. I believe this opportunity would be mutually enriching, and I am eager to contribute to your children’s learning journey.

Please let me know if you would like to discuss this further. I would be happy to arrange a call at your convenience.

Yours sincerely,

Lucía Gómez

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 8.0

The letter responds fully to all three bullet points with appropriate tone, clear purpose, and well-developed relevant detail, from qualifications to willingness to help with household tasks. Language is flexible and largely precise, with only rare minor slips such as slightly awkward punctuation around the apposition describing Spanish. The main limitation is simply that the content, while complete, stays somewhat formulaic rather than distinctly personalised.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

TA Task Achievement

8.0

The letter directly addresses all three bullet points from the prompt with suitable semi-formal register, a clear opening reference to the advertisement, and well-developed supporting detail, with only minor generic touches.

CC Coherence and Cohesion

8.0

Ideas progress logically through a clear paragraph plan covering suitability, additional help, and motivation, linked by cohesive devices used naturally and effectively throughout.

LR Lexical Resource

8.0

Vocabulary is flexible and precise, with natural collocations such as 'proficiency levels', 'mutually enriching', and 'learning journey', and only rare imprecision.

GRA Grammatical Range and Accuracy

8.0

A wide range of sentence structures, including complex and conditional forms, is used with flexibility and consistent accuracy, with only a minor punctuation slip around 'my native language - Spanish,'.

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