Dear Mr and Mrs Henry, Recently, I came across an you have asked for someone from Spain to teach the Spanish language to your two children. I have decided to apply for it because the opportunity would help me meet the cost of running an orphanage in a remote village of in Latin America the beautiful continent of Australia . , I would like to say that I have a bubbly and easy-going personality which makes it rather easy for me to relate to the children. Besides, I have also done babysitting jobs to help a few relatives of mine to take care of their children and received some formal . I have also in teaching young children because I am passionate about teaching them. In addition to taking care of your children, I could also prepare some delicious Spanish food and delicacies on some special occasions to surprise your . I am hoping that you would offer me the job. Thank you in advance. Yours sincerely, Maria Lucy
Sample response & feedback
Application Letter to Teach Children Language in Australia
Question
You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter explain why you think you would be suitable for the job say what else you could do for the family give your reasons for wanting the job You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear …………………… ,
Annotated response
11 correction notes
Overall assessment
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter covers all three task points with relevant experience, a practical offer of extra help and clear personal reasons for applying. The motivations are valid responses to the prompt. Its main weaknesses are the single-block presentation and several awkward expressions; the link between childcare qualifications and teaching Spanish could also be clearer.
IELTS criteria
How each score was decided
TA Task Achievement
6.5The letter covers suitability, additional help and personal reasons for applying. Funding an orphanage and exploring Australia are relevant motivations, while the childcare experience and teaching diploma could be linked more explicitly to teaching Spanish to the two children.
CC Coherence and Cohesion
7.0The ideas move from application and motivation to qualifications and additional help, but the entire letter appears in one block. Separating the greeting, body sections and closing would make the changes of focus easier to follow.
LR Lexical Resource
7.0Vocabulary is generally flexible and natural for a job application, with phrases like 'bubbly and easy-going personality', though occasional awkward collocations such as 'in my defence of availing this opportunity' reduce precision.
GRA Grammatical Range and Accuracy
7.0A good range of sentence structures is used with generally accurate control, including relative and subordinate clauses, with only minor errors that do not impede meaning.