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Application Letter to Teach Children Language in Australia

Question

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You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter explain why you think you would be suitable for the job say what else you could do for the family give your reasons for wanting the job You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear …………………… ,

Annotated response

10 correction notes

I am writing to express my interest in the job opportunity I came across recently – teaching English to two children in Australia for a year. With my extensive experience as an English tutor and a deep passion for language education, I believe I am well-suited for this role.

In addition to providing high-quality English lessons, I could also assist with other tasks such as , cultural exchange, and even light household duties if needed. My adaptability and willingness to go the extra mile would greatly benefit the family.

This job appeals to me for several reasons. Firstly, I have a strong desire to immerse myself in a new culture and broaden my horizons. Secondly, working with children is incredibly rewarding, and I find joy in witnessing their growth and development. Lastly, the opportunity to live in a beautiful country like Australia is truly enticing.

Shanaya Adya

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The letter clearly covers all three bullet points in a consistently formal and well-organized way, with fluent writing and a good range of vocabulary. Its main limitation is a somewhat generic, formulaic quality, with relevant but thinly developed personal detail that weakens persuasive impact.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

TA Task Achievement

7.0

The purpose is clear, all three bullets from the advertisement task are addressed in an appropriate formal register, though the supporting detail remains somewhat generic rather than fully developed.

CC Coherence and Cohesion

7.0

Ideas progress logically across well-separated paragraphs with effective sequencing devices such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Lastly', with only mild formulaic patterning.

LR Lexical Resource

7.0

Vocabulary is flexible and mostly precise, including phrases like 'immerse myself in a new culture' and 'go the extra mile', with no significant inaccuracy.

GRA Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.5

Complex sentences and coordinated clauses are controlled accurately throughout. The letter shows a good grammatical range without a clear recurring grammatical error.

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