Inquiring About a Work-Related Seminar Abroad

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  • Travel
  • Request

You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar. In your letter: - ask for information about the seminar dates - ask for details of the programme - ask about accommodation - ask about the cost

Annotated response

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am keen to partake in the seminar you are going to organise next month in Finland. I am hoping to get further information about it to finalise my participation. I am Raj Muthuraman, working as a senior architect at BT Financial Group in India. Currently, I am managing a research and Recovery of Technical Orchestration’, for the company and I believe your would be a great help to me. However, the invitation I received for the event did not confirm the dates as they were still being finalised. Can you confirm the schedule and provide an agenda for the event so that I can plan ahead? Also, can you suggest some good hotels in the area with an indicative cost? That will help me in planning my travel, accommodation and the cost of the trip. It would be great if you could send me the requested details at your by the end of this week by fax or email. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Raj Muthuraman

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.5

The letter has a clear professional purpose and requests the dates, agenda and accommodation costs. It does not explicitly ask about the registration fee, and the entire letter is one paragraph. Some event wording is repetitive, although the overall meaning remains clear.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Achievement

6.5

The letter clearly requests dates, an agenda and hotel recommendations with approximate hotel costs. However, it does not explicitly ask about the seminar registration fee, so the cost enquiry remains incomplete.

Coherence and Cohesion

5.5

The purpose and requests can be followed, but the entire letter is written as one continuous paragraph. The professional background, enquiries and closing need separate grouping.

Lexical Resource

7.0

There is good professional vocabulary, but symposium on Enterprise Architecture Seminar repeats the event label awkwardly. Partake in is a valid expression; the greater need is to state the seminar topic and arrangements more directly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.5

A good range of sentence structures is used with frequent error-free clauses, with only minor issues such as slightly overlong compound requests affecting elegance.

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