Inquiring About a Work-Related Seminar Abroad

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You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar. In your letter: - ask for information about the seminar dates - ask for details of the programme - ask about accommodation - ask about the cost

Annotated response

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Dear Sir/Madam

I am writing to you to seek additional information in relation to the project management seminar that your company is going to conduct this year.

Since I have been receiving a lot of positive feedback about your last year’s seminars from some of my colleagues who have attended it, I would very much like to participate in this year’s seminar. To materialize my intention, I would like you to please about the following:

– Dates on which the seminar is being conducted.

– A detailed agenda.

– Options for accommodation.

– The cost of the seminar with and without accommodation.

Once I am supplied with the requested information, I will be able to assess if it is feasible for me to attend the seminar. I would be eagerly waiting for your response and I hope you have a good package to offer me. Thank you.

Yours Faithfully,

Irfan

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The letter covers all four required points and maintains a consistently formal, polite register, which is its strongest aspect. The main limitation is that the requests are delivered as a bare list rather than developed into fuller paragraphs with elaborated detail. Language is generally controlled and varied, with only minor lapses such as awkward phrasing in the closing lines.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Achievement

7.0

The letter achieves its purpose with a clear, suitably formal tone and addresses all four bullet points (dates, programme, accommodation, cost), though the requests are stated as a list without elaborated detail, limiting full development.

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0

The response is logically organised with a clear opening, body, and closing, but the bulleted presentation of the core requests makes progression somewhat mechanical rather than fully flexible.

Lexical Resource

7.0

Vocabulary is sufficiently flexible and precise for the purpose, with phrases like materialize my intention and assess if it is feasible, despite occasional slightly unnatural collocations such as a good package to offer me.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0

Relative clauses, passive forms and subordinate clauses show generally good control. However, the plural seminars is later referred to with singular it in who have attended it. The capital letter in the closing is a presentation choice rather than evidence of a grammatical error.

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