Norbiton Industrial Area Redevelopment Maps

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Cambridge IELTS 17 Academic Test 1 Writing Task 1 visual

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The maps illustrate an industrial region in Norbiton compared with an intended layout of developing the place in some years to come. Overall, it is evident that there will be tremendous changes in infrastructure that will be affected by the future plan.

To commence with, in the current plan, there is a river running at the northern border of the layout, and beyond it is farmland. However, no bridge aiding workers to cross the river to the other side. Interestingly, in the future plan, the central part of the town the central part of the town is mostly dominated by factories which stretch to the , but in some years to come, it is planned that most of the factory buildings will be replaced with housing units.

Moreover, in the present plan, there is , whereas, in the future layout, there will be an improvement in the infrastructure which will dominate the central part of the and stretch to the eastern part. Some of these changes will include . will remain unchanged in the future plan.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response identifies the main transformation from factories to housing and the new river bridge, showing sound selection of key features at adequate length. Its main limitations are some vague or imprecise descriptions of layout changes, a confusing use of the word infrastructure, and occasional grammatical errors such as sentence fragments.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Achievement

6.0

The response gives a clear overview of major change and covers relevant features such as the new bridge, housing replacing factories and new amenities, but several details are vague or loosely stated, including describing housing and facilities collectively as infrastructure, and the reported features are not always located precisely against the maps.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

Progression is broadly clear with an overview and logical present-to-future comparisons, though cohesion devices such as 'interestingly' and 'it is also interesting to know' are mechanical and some comparisons, like the claim about infrastructure dominating the central part, are hard to follow.

Lexical Resource

6.0

There is adequate range for a map comparison (replaced with, dominated by, stretch to, intended layout), but word choice is at times imprecise or inappropriate, as in 'a limited number of infrastructure', 'vicinity' and 'tremendous changes in infrastructure'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

A mix of simple and complex structures is used with some accuracy, but errors are noticeable, including the fragment 'However, no bridge aiding workers to cross the river', faulty passive constructions and article problems, though meaning generally remains clear.