Family Weekly Spending in 1968 and 2018

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Cambridge IELTS 17 Academic Test 3 Writing Task 1 visual

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the distribution of weekly in both 1968 and 2018.

Overall, a significant evolution in the household’s spending habits over the fifty-year period is seen, emphasizing the increasing importance of leisure activities and housing costs

Initially, in 1968, the primary concerns for families were food, followed by housing, clothing, and footwear. However, a significant transformation occurred in 2018, when leisure activities emerged as the for In 2018, households allocated 35% of their income to food, with housing and clothing each representing 15% of expenditures. On the other hand, fuel and power expenses remained modest, of the overall budget.

A noteworthy shift in spending patterns is evident in 2018, with leisure activities accounting for around 22% of expenses, surpassing food expenditures, which comprised about 18% of the budget. Moreover, housing costs also experienced a substantial increase, exceeding food expenses and representing approximately 28% of the total budget.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response is organised into clear paragraphs with a stated overview and generally fluent language. Its main limitation is substantial data inaccuracy: several figures, such as food at 35% and housing at 28% in 2018, contradict the chart, which actually shows food at about 35% in 1968 and housing rising to roughly 19% in 2018.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Achievement

5.0

The response includes an overview and attempts comparisons, but multiple data points are inaccurate or misattributed to the wrong year, including food at 35% in 2018, housing at 28%, and clothing at 15%, which weakens detail reliability.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

Information is arranged in a logical paragraph structure with a clear overview and some linking devices, though references to 'communities' rather than families and slightly mechanical transitions reduce cohesion.

Lexical Resource

6.5

The response uses an adequate range of vocabulary for describing expenditure changes, including terms like 'allocation', 'expenditures', and 'noteworthy shift', with only minor imprecision in wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.5

A variety of structures is demonstrated, including complex sentences and passive voice, with errors that are present but generally non-impeding.