Family Weekly Spending in 1968 and 2018

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Annotated response

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The bar graph the weekly by families in a particular nation for between 1968 and 2018. Data is calibrated into percentages.

Overall, it is that there was maximum spending on food whereas minimum experienced on fuel and power.

was 35% for food in 1968, and it declined by half in 2018. In contrast, the spending on a weekly basis by families was 9%more than in 2018 as compared to the initial year, which touched 19%. Likewise, a negligible difference was observed for fuel and power in the given time period. In spite of it, its utilization of it was 10% in comparison, and it reduced steadily by 5% in 2018.

the expenditure on was almost similar in the two years, which was around 7%. At the same time, the preference of families was less towards than under one-tenth. The consumption of income turned twice, increasing from 9% to18%. the usage of had started by8%for leisure which rose with13% and touched to22% in 2018.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 5.0

The response covers most categories and attempts an overview, which is its strongest aspect, but the data reporting is often unclear and several figures and categories are confused or unsupported by the chart. Language control is weak throughout, with frequent grammatical breakdowns and imprecise wording that obscures meaning.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Achievement

5.0

The response attempts an overview and covers several categories with some accurate figures (e.g. food falling from 35% to about half), but category labels and data are frequently confused or garbled, such as the unclear housing reference, the misreported fuel and power change, and the incoherent sentence about personal goods and transport.

Coherence and Cohesion

5.5

There is a visible overall structure with an introduction, overview, and detail paragraphs, but progression within paragraphs is hard to follow because referents like 'it', 'its utilization of it', and 'the consumption of income' do not clearly link to categories.

Lexical Resource

5.0

Vocabulary shows some range of change-related language, but there are frequent imprecise or inappropriate items such as 'weekly salary consumed', 'alternative eight things', and 'usage of had started', which reduce clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.0

Sentence structures are attempted with some complex forms, but errors are frequent and sometimes impede meaning, including 'its utilization of it', 'the usage of had started by8%for leisure', and missing or misplaced articles and prepositions.

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