Women in Police and Military Forces

The response addresses both views and gives a clear, consistent opinion, with main ideas developed through relevant explanation and examples, though development is occasionally general.

Ideas are organised logically across clear paragraphs with a range of cohesive devices, progression is easy to follow, though some linking is slightly mechanical.

Vocabulary is flexible and generally precise for the topic, with some less natural collocations such as bring far greater results, but meaning is never obscured.

A wide range of complex structures is used with flexibility and accuracy; errors are minor and do not impede communication.

The response addresses both views clearly, develops each with explanation and examples, and states a consistent personal opinion throughout, though some arguments rely on generalised rather than fully extended support.

Ideas progress logically across well-organised paragraphs with clear linking devices, although some referencing and transitions, such as 'They keep arguing', feel slightly mechanical or imprecise.

Vocabulary is sufficiently flexible for the topic, with phrases like 'exposing the Germans’ schemes' and 'diversity of talents', but some collocations are awkward, such as 'delicate physical structures' and 'excel over men'.

A variety of complex structures is used effectively, including conditionals and relative clauses, yet recurring errors in comparatives and word order, such as 'Had they been not allowed', slightly reduce accuracy.

The response addresses both views with relevant, extended ideas and a clear opinion sustained from the introduction through the conclusion, though some support relies on general assertion rather than fully developed examples.

Ideas progress logically across clear paragraphs with effective referencing and cohesive devices, with only occasional mechanical or slightly loose connections.

Vocabulary is flexible and largely precise, including terms like 'contend', 'subduing', and 'traditional domain', though a few collocations such as 'potential skills differences' lack accuracy.

A wide range of complex structures is used with generally good control, while occasional awkward phrasing and minor errors do not impede meaning.

The essay discusses both views and consistently supports equal opportunities. The historical examples are relevant, but the sports analogy and firearms rebuttal need clearer links to job requirements. The unsupported claim about US shooting totals does not by itself establish a gender difference in aggression.

Ideas progress logically through clear paragraphing and linking devices, though some referencing and transitions, such as the pivot within the second body paragraph, are occasionally slightly mechanical or abrupt.

Vocabulary is wide and precise, with natural collocations like 'de-escalate situations', 'muscle mass and stamina', and 'physical disadvantages', demonstrating flexible and accurate usage with minimal awkwardness.

A broad range of complex structures is used with generally good control. The comma splice after “Take competitive sports as an example”, the complement “opponents against”, and repeated spaces before punctuation are specific errors, but the meaning remains clear.