Sharing Personal Information Online for Everyday Activities

The response addresses the question directly with a clear stated position that the trend is negative, develops both benefits and risks with explanations and illustrative examples, and reaches a consistent conclusion.

Ideas progress logically through clear paragraphing and a range of cohesive devices such as 'for example', 'in this sense' and 'however', though some referencing and transitions feel slightly mechanical at points.

Vocabulary is sufficiently flexible and precise, with natural collocations like 'information leakage', 'data mining' and 'phishing attempts', alongside only occasional awkward phrasing such as 'registration of private information'.

A variety of complex structures is used with generally good control, including concessive and relative clauses, while errors such as faulty inversion in 'not only the users will get' and the uncountable noun form 'junk mails' occur but do not impede meaning.