Photographers Following Famous People Everywhere

The response addresses all parts of the task, presents a clear position throughout, and extends main ideas with relevant support, though development remains somewhat general.

Ideas progress logically across clearly organized paragraphs with a range of cohesive devices used naturally, despite occasionally formulaic linking.

Vocabulary is sufficiently flexible and precise, with natural collocations such as 'undue stress' and 'cross a line', though some phrases are mildly conventional.

A variety of complex structures is used with good control, and errors are minor and non-impeding, such as slightly awkward phrasing in 'take a much higher precedence'.

Both views and a clear personal position are present, with a relevant newspaper example; however, the claim about revealing the truth is undeveloped and the earnings argument partly repeats the premise of fame.

Ideas are organised logically into clear paragraphs with appropriate cohesive devices like 'on the one hand' and 'in conclusion', and progression is easy to follow throughout.

Vocabulary communicates the argument clearly but relies heavily on famous, photos and broad expressions such as have limits; more precise references would improve range and clarity.

A mix of simple and complex structures is used with generally good control and frequent error-free sentences, but the range of complex forms remains limited and somewhat repetitive.

Both views are developed and the privacy-first position is clear. The lifestyle-to-career example and the final appeal to a public right to information would benefit from more precise justification.

Progression is logical with clear paragraphing and cohesive devices, though linking is at times mechanical and formulaic.

Vocabulary is broad and generally precise, particularly in discussing privacy and media ethics, though expressions such as “relentless photographing” are less natural.

A wide range of complex structures is controlled well, including concessive clauses, relative clauses and semicolon-linked independent clauses; the text contains no clear recurring grammatical error.