Are People Today More Dependent or Independent?

Some people think that individuals today are more dependent on each other. Others believe people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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WhyThis is aDiscussion essay — it asks you to discuss two opposing views and give your own.

SoWe split the ideas intoFirst view(supports the first view)andSecond view(supports the second view).

First view

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Second view

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Response 01

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Essay · 290 words · 4 paragraphs · 19 comments

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Response 01
Estimated band6.5/ 9

Overall assessment

The response addresses all parts of the task, presenting both perspectives and a clear personal opinion with relevant, if sometimes loosely connected, supporting ideas. The strongest aspect is the generally clear argument structure, while the main limitation is recurring grammatical and word-choice errors that occasionally strain precision.

TR

Task Response

Both views are addressed and a clear opinion is stated and sustained, though some ideas, such as the social media study, are relevant but unevenly developed.

6.5
CC

Coherence and Cohesion

Progression is generally clear with a logical paragraph structure, but cohesion is sometimes mechanical and the link between evidence and claims is occasionally loose.

6.5
LR

Lexical Resource

Vocabulary is adequate for the task with some flexibility, yet there are noticeable word-choice and collocation errors, such as 'heavily involved on' and 'less happier to'.

6.5
GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

A mix of simple and complex structures is used, but errors in agreement and comparison, for example 'the posts only shows' and the misplaced 'Although', recur throughout.

6.0

What to work on next

Proofread for subject-verb agreement and comparative constructions, and strengthen the link between examples and the main point of each paragraph.

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