High Salaries of Sports Professionals vs Other Jobs

Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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WhyThis is aDiscussion essay — it asks you to discuss two opposing views and give your own.

SoWe split the ideas intoFirst view(supports the first view)andSecond view(supports the second view).

First view

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Second view

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Response 01
Estimated band6.0/ 9

Overall assessment

The response addresses both views with relevant, well-chosen examples and maintains a clear overall progression. Its main limitations are a conclusion that shifts toward what should happen rather than directly resolving the fairness question, plus recurring grammatical and word-choice errors such as 'sport starts' and 'has became'.

TR

Task Response

Both views are addressed with relevant developed examples, but the response mainly explains why the pay gap exists and the opinion in the conclusion does not directly resolve whether high sports salaries are justified or unfair.

6.0
CC

Coherence and Cohesion

Ideas are arranged in clear paragraphs with a generally logical progression, though cohesion is somewhat mechanical and some links between ideas are loosely connected.

6.0
LR

Lexical Resource

Vocabulary is adequate for the topic with some appropriate collocations, but there are noticeable slips and imprecise choices such as 'sport starts', 'ample amount of money', and 'mercenary brands'.

6.0
GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

A mix of simple and complex structures is used, but frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, and article use, for example 'the main reason... are not paid', 'has became', and 'more that those', reduce accuracy.

6.0

What to work on next

State a direct position on whether high sports salaries are justified or unfair, then support that verdict throughout rather than only explaining why the pay gap exists.

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