The response maintains a clear preference for children’s sport and acknowledges the case for elite funding. Relevant ideas are developed, but the relative value of the two spending priorities needs more explicit comparison.
7.0Paragraphing is logical and cohesive devices are used well, though occasional referencing and linking feel slightly mechanical.
7.0Vocabulary is varied and generally effective, with expressions such as “stoke their competitive drive”. Some combinations, including “honing competitors” and “the most chance”, could be more natural or precise.
8.0GRAGrammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of structures, including complex and conditional forms, is handled with consistent accuracy and only minor slips.
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