A clear preference for government control is maintained, with relevant ideas about unequal access and recreational use. However, the opposing view shifts towards free provision and increased supply rather than unrestricted consumption, and the benefits of regulation need fuller explanation.
7.0The discussion moves logically from the two views to a consistent conclusion, using clear transitions. References such as “the first assertion” and “a contributing factor” could be more explicit, and the rainwater point needs a clearer link to the argument it supports.
7.0The essay uses a varied topic vocabulary, but expressions such as “pure water amenities” and “the proper direction” lack precision. “Leaving the poor in the lurch” is a correctly formed idiom, although a more specific description would clarify the access problem.
6.0GRAGrammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of complex sentences is used with generally good grammatical control. “I would discuss” makes the intended essay plan sound hypothetical; a direct present-tense thesis would be clearer. “No price for using it” is awkward wording rather than a grammatical error.
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