The essay directly answers the question with a clear, consistent position, covers both acknowledged benefits and argued drawbacks, and reaches a firm conclusion, though some supporting points remain somewhat general.
7.0Paragraphing is logical and progression is clear with effective linking devices such as 'nevertheless' and 'more problematically', with cohesion occasionally feeling slightly mechanical.
7.0Vocabulary shows good range and precision, including 'impressionable', 'discerning', and 'unattainable', though expressions such as 'poses more drawbacks than benefits' and 'over-idolization of their influence' show occasional awkwardness in word combinations.
7.0GRAGrammatical Range and Accuracy
Grammar demonstrates a wide range of complex structures with strong control and only rare, minor errors that do not impede meaning.
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