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Response 01
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Education is considered backbone of a nation. It is also an important element of human life. No nation can develop and prosper unless properly educated. However, both men and women are equally considered to contribute national achievement. Hence, to ensure empowerment and gender discrimination I believe that the universities should offer equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.
The main reason I support the notion that the tertiary institutes should accept equal number of boys and girls is to eliminate gender discrimination. In many countries in the world especially in western countries both men and women enjoy equal degree of freedom in all aspect of life. Unfortunately, this is not the same in third world countries. In fact there is an opposite picture exists especially in poor nations where male dominate in most of the aspects. For instance, in some nations male doctors are not allowed to inspect and treat female patients and thus the authorities give preference in female candidates in those subjects. Whereas in developed world there is virtually no sex differentiation and pupils can get admitted any subjects they are interested in. What I want to highlight here is that if educational institutions pick equal number of students from both gender it will not only eliminate impartiality that might exist once graduates enter employment but also equalize the balance between male and female employees.
The other reason I strongly believe that all educational institutes should take the same number of male and female candidates is due to gender empowerment. As we are aware that female candidates may have more attraction to nursing programs whereas male candidates may be interested in sport. This way it might bring inequality of gender ration once they are graduated. Therefore, to avoid additional candidates to a particular discipline universities can offer admissions same number of boys and girls. In fact, such practice would help to stop the disruption between both sexes and will make sure empowerment of both sexes uniquely.
In , needless to say that for every stages of national and international achievement both sexes are vitally essential. So I believe that both male and female should receive equal level of education and, hence, all institutes should accept the same number of genders in every subject.
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Response 02
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Many people feel that both females and males should be in equal number when attending a course at an educational institution. I am inclined to disagree with this statement. Due to gender equality most people feel that everyone should be given equal rights, but it strikes me that this is not the case.
To begin with, It seems to me that women have always been treated inferior to men, it has been a struggle through the years for them to stand out and not be judged by people for what they do for a living. And I can say that the same goes for men. Why males cannot be stay at home dads? Why females cannot be football players or engineers without people judging them? Having the same number of man and women in each class seems like a good idea, that way all of them have equal chances to stand out and pursue their dreams regardless their gender.
Nevertheless, to my way of thinking this measure solves the problem of gender equality but creates another issue. It is true that people should be treated the same, but, a University is the place where people are accepted for their intelligence, their character and ambition. For instance, it is not fair to take an equal number of females and males when maybe the male candidates are better, or the female ones. It is a matter of who deserves the place, that should be the only criteria.
All things considered , I firmly believe that Feminism is about people being treated equal. It is not fair to anyone if opportunities are taken form men and given to women or vice-versa. Everyone should fight for what they want and forget about all the stereotypes that stop us from achieving our goals.
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Response 03
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Education plays a pivotal role in a child’s life as it allows them to think critically and creatively, increasing their creativity and logical thinking. Similarly, it is thought that universities should embrace the idea of equal seat distribution between girls and boys. In my perspective, I completely agree with this statement, as all individuals deserve an equal right to education. In the following paragraphs, I shall explain my point of view in detail.
Universities should support educational equality since it is founded on the notion of justice in the distribution of resources, opportunity, treatment, and achievement for all students, regardless of gender. If all students do not receive equal education, then human talent that could contribute to society is not nurtured properly. For example, suppose only male children receive education and participate in everyday activities that contribute to the growth of society and families. In that case, we deny female students the opportunity to follow their skills and passions.
Additionally, each student’s skill is distinct from that of another. Gender-equitable education systems empower both girls and boys by encouraging the development of life skills such as self-control, communication, and critical thinking. Boys gain directly from an education devoid of harmful gender stereotypes. Masculine standards can drive disengagement from education, child labour, gang violence, and recruitment into armed organisations in many nations. Also, many boys walk out of secondary school due to a necessity or desire to earn money, as many of them think the curriculum is unrelated to job prospects.
However, student numbers are indeed determined by the number of applications received by the institution, and if the university decides on equal education, the university will not receive enough applicants. But, failing to provide sufficient opportunity for both genders would raise the likelihood of prejudice in society.
In conclusion, education is necessary for the overall development of children regardless of their gender. Education equality amongst students won’t just avoid prejudice but will also foster the notion of justice.
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Response 04
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These days, the issue of gender equality attracts a lot of attention and people argue over how to deal with perceived inequalities in employment and education. Some think that universities should be required to accept equal numbers of male and female students in each subject, but this is a profoundly ignorant stance.
To begin with, for equality to flourish, people should always be chosen based upon their abilities rather than their identity. In education, as in sports or business, people with talent should be given opportunities. It is extremely unfair that someone is chosen because of their race or gender, despite having lower abilities than someone else. If universities were required to split their classes according to gender, there would almost certainly be a few talented people who were not able to attend because some less talented person of the opposite gender was picked instead. This is unfair for the students and detrimental for society.
The fact is that the two genders do have somewhat different preferences and abilities in terms of academic subjects, and while equality of opportunity should exist, it cannot be forced upon people or else it will come at the expense of some others. In teaching, for example, university classes are usually about eighty percent female. If a university was forced to have fifty percent from each gender, there would be a large number of eager young women who could not attend their desired course. This is true in the STEM courses, too, but the opposite way around. If you forced a university to accept more women, then talented men would be declined.
In conclusion, the idea of forcing educational institutions to accept equal numbers of students from either gender is patently absurd. It may sound fair, but it is actually very unfair on the students, and would have negative ramifications for society as a whole.
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Response 05
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In my opinion, men and women should have the same educational opportunities. However, I do not agree with the idea of accepting equal proportions of each gender in every university subject.
Having the same number of men and women on all degree courses is simply unrealistic. Student numbers on any course depend on the applications that the institution receives. If a university decided to fill courses with equal numbers of males and females, it would need enough applicants of each gender. In reality, many courses are more popular with one gender than the other, and it would not be practical to aim for equal proportions. For example, nursing courses tend to attract more female applicants, and it would be difficult to fill these courses if fifty per cent of the places needed to go to males.
Apart from the practical concerns expressed above, I also believe that it would be unfair to base admission to university courses on gender. Universities should continue to select the best candidates for each course according to their qualifications. In this way, both men and women have the same opportunities, and applicants know that they will be successful if they work hard to achieve good grades at school. If a female student is the best candidate for a place on a course, it is surely wrong to reject her in favor of a male student with lower grades or fewer qualifications.
In conclusion, the selection of university students should be based on merit, and it would be both impractical and unfair to change to a selection procedure based on gender.
