Children Making Their Own Everyday Choices

The response addresses both views and states a clear opinion that guidance from parents is decisive, with relevant explanation and an example, though some ideas are unevenly developed and the connection between selfishness and decision-making is at times loosely argued.

There is a clear overall progression with paragraphing and linking devices, but cohesion is at times mechanical and transitions such as the shift into the counterargument weaken the logical flow.

The response shows an adequate range of vocabulary with some less common items such as 'impervious' and 'instill a sense of responsibility', though occasional imprecision, such as 'different avenues', reduces accuracy.

A variety of complex structures is used with generally good control, but recurring errors in pronoun reference and clause construction, such as 'their needs before others', affect clarity at points.

The response addresses all parts of the task, discusses both views with relevant ideas, and presents a clear consistent position throughout, though some points remain generally rather than fully developed.

Ideas are logically organized with clear paragraphing and a range of cohesive devices used naturally, though progression within paragraphs is somewhat formulaic at times.

Vocabulary is sufficiently flexible and precise, using appropriate topic-related terms such as self-centeredness, compromise, and sense of responsibility, though some phrasing is repetitively recycled.

A variety of complex structures is used with good control and frequent error-free sentences, including relative clauses and conditional relationships. Some sentence patterns recur, but the phrase "within a reasonable limit" is grammatical and should not be treated as an accuracy error.

The response discusses both views, presents a consistent opinion, and supports main ideas with relevant examples, though some ideas are developed unevenly rather than fully extended.

Ideas progress logically across clear paragraphs with a range of cohesive devices, and cohesion is generally well managed despite some mechanical linking.

Vocabulary is sufficiently flexible and precise for the topic, with occasional spelling slips such as 'responsibilty' and 'conscientous' that do not impede meaning.

A range of complex structures is used with generally good control, and the errors present are minor and rarely affect communication.

The response addresses all parts of the task, discusses both views with relevant if generalised support, and presents a clear, consistent opinion throughout.

Ideas are logically organised with clear paragraphing and a range of cohesive devices, though some linking is mechanical and a few transitions are slightly formulaic.

There is a sufficient range of vocabulary for flexible and precise expression, with some less common items such as 'detrimental effect' and 'fragile-minded', alongside occasional repetition of phrasing.

A variety of complex structures is used with generally good control, and errors in areas like comma splices and article use are minor and rarely impede meaning.

The response addresses all parts of the task, discusses both viewpoints with developed supporting ideas, and presents a clear, sustained personal position.

The essay is logically organised into clear paragraphs with a range of cohesive devices, though referencing and some transitions are occasionally mechanical.

There is a sufficient range of vocabulary for the topic, but some collocations and expressions are imprecise or unnatural, such as 'even in the least matters' and 'severe hardship learning to give in'.

A range of complex sentences is used with generally good grammatical control. Some constructions are cumbersome, especially the sentence beginning "In contrast", but meaning remains clear. The progressive infinitive in "less likely to be struggling" is grammatically valid.

The essay addresses both perspectives, presents a clear and consistent opinion, and supports main ideas with relevant explanation and examples, though the first view is developed less fully than the second.

Ideas progress logically through a clear four-paragraph structure with appropriate cohesive devices such as 'on the one hand' and 'moreover', although some linking is slightly mechanical.

Vocabulary is sufficiently flexible and precise, with natural collocations like 'nurtures a sense of independence' and 'cultivates responsible decision-making', with only minor imprecision such as 'food, dresses, and recreation'.

A wide range of complex structures is used with generally good control, including conditionals and relative clauses, and errors are minor and do not impede meaning.