Causes of Youth Violent Crime and Emotional Learning

Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologists claim that the basic reason for this is that children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Essay ideas: Causes of Youth Violent Crime and Emotional Learning

WhyThis is anOpinion essay — it asks whether you agree or disagree with a statement.

SoWe split the ideas intoReasons to agree(supports the statement)andReasons to disagree(argues against it).

Reasons to agree

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Reasons to disagree

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Essay · 387 words · 4 paragraphs · 19 comments

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Response 01
Estimated band6.0/ 9

Overall assessment

The strongest aspect is the response's clear overall position that factors beyond parents and teachers drive youth crime, supported by extended discussion of technology and a counter-argument. The main limitation is recurring grammatical and word-choice errors, along with slightly repetitive argumentation, which occasionally obscure the message.

TR

Task Response

The response addresses the question with a clear position that parents and teachers are not primarily responsible, developing relevant supporting ideas about games and social media, though development is somewhat uneven and the framing paragraph drifts from the prompt's focus.

6.0
CC

Coherence and Cohesion

Ideas are organised into clear paragraphs with linking devices, but progression is occasionally mechanical and some sentences and transitions, such as 'Besides of this', reduce coherence.

6.0
LR

Lexical Resource

Vocabulary is adequate for the topic with some range, but imprecise word choices like 'growths', 'most inspiring', and 'too overlooked to conclude' limit precision.

6.0
GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, and clause construction, such as 'there is numerous discussions' and 'the time children's teachers and parents is limited', sometimes impede clarity.

5.5

What to work on next

Revise sentence-level accuracy, particularly subject-verb agreement, article use, and prepositions, while tightening repetitive phrasing to present each argument more precisely.

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