Whether Women Make Better Parents Than Men

The essay addresses both views and offers a clear conclusion favouring shared parenting, but ideas are unevenly developed and some claims, such as fathers' equal attachment proving men make better parents, are poorly reasoned.

Progression is broadly clear with simple linking devices and paragraphing, but cohesion is mechanical and formulaic, with logical connections between ideas sometimes weak or contradictory.

Vocabulary is adequate for the task with some attempts at less common phrasing, though there are noticeable imprecisions such as 'children brought up' and 'make good parents than women'.

A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but frequent grammatical errors in agreement, articles, and comparables, such as 'children also slowly reaching to father', reduce overall accuracy and control.

The essay presents a relevant clear position and covers both views, but ideas are unevenly developed, somewhat repetitive, and supported by generalisation rather than extended reasoning.

Paragraphing is logical and cohesive devices are used throughout, though linking is at times mechanical or inaccurate, as in 'In contrary to this' and 'Thus, mother occupies most of the child's time'.

There is an adequate range of vocabulary for the topic, but imprecise collocations such as 'women triumph over men', 'main ingredients', and 'keeps her eyes on' reduce precision.

A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, and phrasing occur without obscuring the overall message.

The essay addresses the question with a clear position that both parents matter equally, and each view is supported, though ideas remain somewhat generic and underdeveloped in places.

Paragraphing is logical and progression is clear with basic connectors, but cohesion relies on mechanical linking and some sentences connect loosely.

Vocabulary is adequate for the topic with some natural collocations, but it shows limited flexibility and recurring informal or inaccurate usage such as ponder on and win bread.

A mix of sentence types is used with generally clear meaning, though errors in article use, agreement, and phrasing occur frequently without obscuring the message.

The essay addresses the question with a clear, consistently maintained position and relevant main ideas, but these are supported only in general terms with limited depth or development.

Ideas are organised into logical paragraphs with clear progression, though cohesion depends on basic connectives and some links between sentences are loosely handled.

Vocabulary is adequate for the argument, with relevant words such as 'affectionate' and 'cuddling'. Expressions including 'educate them with good manners' and 'prefer their mother to be parenting them' are awkward. The source already includes both 'passionate' and 'patient'; they are not a mistaken substitution for each other.

A mix of simple and complex sentence forms is used with reasonable accuracy, but frequent minor errors and a tendency toward basic structures reduce overall flexibility.

The response addresses all parts of the task, presents a clear and consistent position that parenting ability is individual rather than gender-based, and develops main ideas with explanations and examples, though some support is generalized and asserted rather than fully substantiated.

Ideas are logically organized into a clear introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, with a range of cohesive devices used naturally and progression generally easy to follow.

The vocabulary is generally adequate and sometimes flexible, but there are noticeable imprecise or unnatural usages such as 'imbibing the morals' and 'take in the lunchbox' that slightly reduce precision.

A variety of complex structures is used with generally good control, though occasional awkward constructions such as 'there cannot be conclusions drawn' and relative clause errors are present without impeding communication.

The writer's viewpoint is clear and supported by three developed reasons about upbringing, temperament and communication. Some broad comparisons between men and women need more careful qualification, and the communication-test claim needs a clearer connection to specific parenting responsibilities.

Paragraphing is logical, sequencing devices such as 'Finally' and 'in contrast' guide the reader smoothly, and progression is clear throughout despite occasional minor cohesion lapses.

Vocabulary is flexible and precise, with natural collocations like 'nurturing', 'conditioning', and 'resort to violence', with only a typographical slip ('shown is intelligence tests') and no impeding inaccuracy.

A wide range of structures is used, including complex subordinate and concessive clauses, with generally strong control and only minor errors such as faulty punctuation after 'child-rearing'.