The disagreement is clear and maintained, and income is supported by a relevant comparison. The technology argument is less precise because its example mixes skill, internet access and physical strain rather than clearly isolating proficiency relative to age. Personal preferences are listed but not developed.
7.0The essay is logically organised with clear paragraph progression and effective linking devices, though the repetition of similar concluding sentences gives the cohesion a somewhat mechanical quality.
7.0Vocabulary is sufficiently flexible and precise, including items like impulse buying, budgeting, and e-commerce, with only occasional awkwardness such as an individual on a minimum limiting precision.
7.0GRAGrammatical Range and Accuracy
A good range of complex structures, including concessive and comparative clauses, is used with generally accurate control, and errors are rare and non-impeding.
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