University Students Doing Other Activities

Full-time university students spend a lot of time studying. Some say they should do other activities too. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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As students in tertiary institutions dedicate a substantial amount of time to their studies, it is sometimes argued that they should also participate in other activities. I partly agree with this assertion, as engaging in extracurricular activities can enhance valuable skills and improve mental well-being, although it may risk affecting academic performance. The primary reason for my support of students taking on diverse responsibilities outside of school is the improvement of practical skills. Engaging in activities beyond the classroom provides opportunities to acquire essential skills not typically taught in academic settings. For example, students involved in anti-smoking campaigns in Vietnam reported improved abilities in deep listening and persuasion after interacting with heavy smokers and encouraging them to quit. Another reason I endorse students’ involvement in various activities is the mental health benefits. Academic work, which often demands intense focus and analytical thinking , can be stressful. Therefore, it is important for students to spend some time on activities such as sports, socializing with friends, or participating in spiritual events to unwind. As a result, they can experience a refreshed state of mind and improved cognitive abilities, which can boost both their overall well-being and academic performance. However, I recognize the potential risk of neglecting academic responsibilities . It is not uncommon for students to become overly involved in extracurricular activities to the point where they lack sufficient time for studying. This may be due to the appeal of these activities or the high level of commitment required for certain roles, such as being a club president. If this situation continues, it could lead to a decline in their academic performance . In conclusion, I largely support the idea of encouraging university students to engage in various activities beyond their studies , as it helps them develop new skills and rejuvenate their minds , even though it may come at the cost of academic performance. I also believe that universities should provide students with tools and strategies to help them balance their academic, personal, and social lives.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.5

The strongest aspect is the response's clear, balanced position developed through well-chosen reasons and a relevant real-world example. The main limitation is that the counterargument about academic decline is somewhat thin and the conclusion introduces a new balancing recommendation without earlier development.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

7.0

The response presents a clear partial-agreement position, develops two supporting reasons with a relevant example, and acknowledges a counterpoint, though the opposing idea is less fully extended.

Coherence and Cohesion

7.5

Ideas progress logically across cohesive paragraphs with varied referencing and linking devices, with only occasional slightly mechanical transitions such as chains of 'therefore' and 'as a result'.

Lexical Resource

7.5

Vocabulary is flexible and precise, including natural collocations like 'refreshed state of mind' and 'high level of commitment', with only minor awkwardness such as 'enhance valuable skills'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

8.0

A wide range of structures is used with strong control, including relative clauses, concessive framing, and complex noun phrases, with errors that are rare and non-impeding apart from minor spacing issues.