Television's Impact on Cultural Development

Television has had a significant influence on the culture of many societies. To what extent would you say that television has positively or negatively affected the cultural development of your society?

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It has been many years since television was first introduced to people and people today still have mixed views on whether it has a positive or a negative influence

Many people believe that television damages culture. It promotes the stronger cultures of countries such as Britain and North America and weakens the cultures of less wealthy countries. This is because the stronger, wealthier countries are able to assert their own culture by producing more programs that are shown widely around the world. These programs then influence people, particularly young people, in the countries where they are shown. Also, because television networks need to attract large audiences to secure their financial survival, they must produce programs which are interesting to a broad range of people. In many countries, this range is very broad because we are a multicultural society and people of all ages like to watch television. To interest all these different people, most television programs are short in length, full of action and excitement, do not require much intelligence or knowledge to understand, and follow universal themes common to all cultures, such as love and crime. Television programs which concentrate on or develop themes pertinent to one particular culture are not so successful because they interest a smaller audience. Nevertheless, that television does have some positive effects on the cultures within a society as well. People who do not live within their own culture can, in a limited way, access it through the multicultural station on the television. For example, Aboriginal children who have grown up in white families, or migrants and international students living in a foreign country, can watch programs from their own culture on the television. In conclusion, I hold the view that television promotes and strengthens those cultures that are wealthy and influential while it weakens the cultures that are already in a weakened position.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The response develops a clear position about television strengthening dominant cultures while weakening others, with relevant economic reasoning and an example of cultural access. Its principal weakness is organisation: almost the entire discussion and conclusion occupy one long paragraph. The typo "we much acknowledge" also reduces accuracy.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

7.5

The response addresses the question directly with a sustained, clearly weighted position that television affects cultures unevenly, developing main ideas with relevant explanation and an example, though the positive effects are touched on more briefly than the negative ones.

Coherence and Cohesion

5.5

The argument has an understandable sequence, but after the short introduction all of the negative effects, positive effects and conclusion are combined in one very long paragraph. Separate paragraphs are needed to make those stages clear; linking expressions alone do not provide effective grouping.

Lexical Resource

7.0

Vocabulary is sufficiently flexible and precise for the topic, with natural collocations such as 'assert their own culture' and 'universal themes', but occasional inaccuracy, including 'we much acknowledge', limits the score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0

Relative and other subordinate clauses provide a range of complex structures with generally good control. The phrase "we much acknowledge" contains an incorrect word where the modal must is intended, but the argument remains understandable.