Television's Impact on Cultural Development

Television has had a significant influence on the culture of many societies. To what extent would you say that television has positively or negatively affected the cultural development of your society?

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has every nook and corner of the world. There are numbers of channels available on the television which give you essential knowledge as well as every human’s life of society thinks that television of communities my point of view, television affects the cultural development of society . I will elaborate it in the following paragraphs of this essay.

The first and foremost positive impact of television spreads encourages in numbers of society about cultural events celebration. In other words, nowadays the events which are related to cultures in a good way on different levels such as on state level or on broadcast on television through nation channel of a nation. As affected by this activity and they also start their cultural fests on the local level such as in their towns and in villages. This entire activity brings and their traditional culture. To add to it, through television persons can also present information about their own cultures to the other people in the distinct parts of the globe. By this, know about all cultures and traditions.

television also the members of a community. It is inevitable that presentations related to several cultures and customs broadcast on television through different channels, So all human beings watch these acts. Then they just want to become like alien masses and adopt foreign customs, traditional cultural activities and so on they forget and indulge in another tradition.

To conclude, every coin has two sides. If television spreads information about cultures to increase their development, then it also can become a great cause of a precious I believe television ought to present which might be proved fruitful for development of all cultures.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 5.0

The response addresses both positive and negative effects of television and offers a clear, balanced position with a conclusion. Its main limitations are garbled, frequently inaccurate sentences that obscure meaning at times and underdeveloped supporting ideas that remain generalized rather than fully explained.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

5.5

The response addresses the question with a clear both-sides position and relevant main ideas, but the ideas are only partially developed and some sentences are so unclear that support is hard to follow.

Coherence and Cohesion

5.0

The essay uses an overall paragraph structure and basic linkers, but progression within paragraphs is often disrupted by incoherent or incomplete sentences that impede the flow of ideas.

Lexical Resource

5.0

Vocabulary shows some attempt at topic-related range such as cultural development and customs, but usage is frequently imprecise or unnatural, as in spreads its legs and become like alien masses.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.0

A mix of simple and complex forms is attempted, yet errors in verb forms, articles, agreement, and sentence construction are frequent and sometimes obscure the intended meaning.