Television's Impact on Cultural Development

Television has had a significant influence on the culture of many societies. To what extent would you say that television has positively or negatively affected the cultural development of your society?

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It has been around forty years since television was first introduced into Australian households and people today still have mixed views on whether it has a positive or a negative influence on the society.

Many people believe that television damages culture. It promotes the stronger cultures of countries such as Britain and North America and weakens the cultures of less wealthy countries. This is because the stronger, wealthier countries are able to assert their own culture by producing more programs that are shown widely around the world. These programs then influence people, particularly young people, in the countries where they are shown.

Also, because television networks need to attract large audiences to secure their financial survival, they must produce programs which are interesting to a broad range of people. In Australia this range is very broad because we are a multicultural society and people of all ages like to watch television. To interest all these different people, most television programs are short in length, full of action and excitement, do not require much intelligence or knowledge to understand, and follow universal themes common to all cultures, such as love and crime. Television programs which concentrate on or develop themes pertinent to one particular culture are not so successful because they interest a smaller audience.

Nevertheless we much acknowledge that television does have some positive effects on the cultures within a society as well. People who do not live within their own culture can, in a limited way, access it through the multicultural station on the television. For example, Aboriginal children who have grown up in white families, or migrants and international students living in Australia, can watch programs from their own culture on the television.

In conclusion, I hold the view that television promotes and strengthens those cultures that are wealthy and influential while it weakens the cultures that are already in a weakened position.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.5

The response presents a clear, well-developed position on television's effects on Australian culture, with logical progression and relevant supporting explanation. Its strongest aspect is the coherent argument structure and generally precise language; the main limitation is that development occasionally relies on general assertion rather than deeper illustration, alongside a few minor language slips.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

7.5

The response addresses all parts of the question with a clear, consistently maintained position and relevantly developed main ideas, though some supporting points remain general rather than fully extended.

Coherence and Cohesion

7.5

Ideas progress logically across well-managed paragraphs with a range of cohesive devices used naturally, with only minor mechanical linkage such as the abrupt 'Also' paragraph opening.

Lexical Resource

7.0

Vocabulary is sufficiently flexible and precise for the argument, featuring items like 'assert their own culture' and 'universal themes', though range is occasionally less ambitious and a slip such as 'much' for 'must' occurs.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0

A variety of complex structures is used with good control, including relative clauses and participial phrases, with errors being minor and rarely impeding communication.