Technology and the Gap Between Rich and Poor

Some people believe the range of technology available to individuals today is increasing the gap between poor people and rich people. Others think it is having an opposite effect. Discuss both of these points of view. What is your opinion on that issue?

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There has been of technology in modern times, and it has been profusely scaling up the rungs incessantly. The breakthrough has modified the lives of people to a much larger extent. Where some standpoints say that it has , others argue that it has . In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall be discussing both the views and my notion in this regard.

There are certain people who claim that the gap between has been increased in terms of luxuries of life. Certain technologies have created disparity and the boundary drawn between the extreme classes. Not only do those technologies provide the wealthy and well off strata a shimmer of opulence, but they also play havoc with the aspirations of the frugal middle class. This view might blend in with the thought processes of some people who might deem it excruciating.

On the other hand, some people between the extreme layers. I side with this notion as it has paved a way for the to be benefitted . Education, which once was not able to be provided and imparted to some section due to unaffordability of the physical institutions to everyone regardless of economic status with a minimal expenditure. Moreover, the skills and courses that one has to look around for in some premier coaching institutes and institutional setup, are now very reasonably priced in the online medium that could be opted for by many. Even in the case of women who couldn’t go out to work due to a plethora of restrictions are now very much employed in the wake of work from home because of the sudden surge of technologies. This would, in turn, the weaker economic lot.

Hence, in conclusion, it could be argued that technology has been a benediction to humanity and a major factor in the . It has indeed bridged the gap between the rich and the poor.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.5

The strongest aspect is the response's clear position and its developed argument for technology narrowing the gap, supported by relevant examples in education and remote work. The main limitation is inflated and often inaccurate vocabulary, which obscures meaning, while the opposing view remains comparatively thinly argued.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.5

Both views are addressed and a clear opinion is presented with relevant supporting examples, though the opposing viewpoint is only lightly developed and its paragraph is padded rather than substantively argued.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.5

Paragraphing and progression are broadly clear with appropriate linking devices, but some connections are mechanical and transitions such as the closing argument are occasionally strained.

Lexical Resource

6.0

There is wide-ranging vocabulary ambition, but frequent unnatural or inaccurate collocations such as 'ubiquitous distension', 'drifting of all the sections', and 'benediction... indistinctively' reduce precision and occasionally obscure meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.5

A variety of complex structures is attempted, including inversion and relative clauses, though errors in agreement and construction, such as 'Education... are now relayed', recur without seriously impeding communication.