Sample response & feedback

Taking Selfies at Famous Places Instead of Looking

Question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place. Why do you think this is happening? Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Annotated response

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, people are visiting famous places but not for gathering , just to take photographs. I that it is a negative development and in this essay I will discuss it is happening.

In the first place, one major reason for visitors for taking pictures is to follow the trend. As it is known, individuals are utilizing their time on social media platforms such as Instagram and . They easily find out popular locations where they can take photographs and post those photos on their social media accounts. Additionally, after posting such pictures on social accounts other people that they have also explored the famous place. As an outcome, themselves satisfied after following the same trend which society is already following.

Furthermore, , is always a negative development. photographs of themselves is one thing but they should also show their interest in the . Without , one can never understand its origin or historic value. pass that information to the next generations also. For instance, go there to capture photos without going inside to understand the history of that palace.

To summarize the above narratives, people visit well-known places in order to fit into the society by my opinion it is a negative development as they are not its historic value and that .

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response clearly answers both questions with a consistent negative position and a relevant supporting example, which is its strongest aspect. The main limitation is the high frequency of grammatical and word-form errors that repeatedly disrupt fluency and precision across the essay.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

TR Task Response

6.0

The essay addresses both parts of the question with a clear negative position, relevant reasons, and a specific example, though ideas are developed only adequately and the social media explanation remains somewhat repetitive.

CC Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

Progression is broadly clear with paragraphing by reason and evaluation, and linkers such as additionally and furthermore are used, but cohesive devices are sometimes mechanical and sentences connect awkwardly.

LR Lexical Resource

6.0

Vocabulary is sufficient for the topic with attempts at less common phrasing such as historic value and exploration, though usage is often imprecise, including ponder, in these days and ages, and taking knowledge.

GRA Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.5

A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but frequent errors in verb forms and agreement, such as visitors to visiting and they shows, repeatedly reduce accuracy and control.