Sample response & feedback

Taking Selfies at Famous Places Instead of Looking

Question

More and more people nowadays visit well-known places to take photographs of themselves, without looking at the place. Why do you think this is happening? Is it a positive or a negative trend?

Annotated response

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In recent years, many tourists have prioritised capturing selfies over genuinely experiencing the places they visit. This phenomenon can be attributed to the influence of social media, the pursuit of social validation, and the changing nature of tourism. The overall impact of this trend is largely negative, in my opinion.

A primary reason for this behaviour is the rise of social media platforms, where individuals seek recognition through likes, shares, and comments. Tourists are often more focused on curating an online persona . This is why they are more interested in rather than truly appreciating and experiencing a tourist spot. They want to show people that they have been to a place the culture and . is increasingly driven by visual content, as popular destinations are frequently marketed through aesthetically pleasing images, encouraging visitors to rather than immerse themselves in their surroundings.

is largely a negative trend as it the cultural and educational value of travel. Instead of learning about historical landmarks or engaging with local communities, tourists often remain the perfect photograph. to overcrowding and environmental degradation. Many travellers flock to scenic spots purely for social media content, leading to excessive foot traffic and pollution. For example, iconic sites like Machu Picchu have implemented visitor restrictions due to damage caused by excessive tourism.

In conclusion, the increasing tendency to prioritise photographs over genuine experiences stems from the influence of social media and the evolving nature of tourism. undermines the essence of travel and leads to environmental concerns.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The response's strongest aspect is its clear, fully developed argument that answers both parts of the question with relevant reasons, a definite evaluative position, and a concrete example. The main limitation is a degree of repetition and formulaic phrasing, particularly in the second paragraph, which slightly dilutes the progression of ideas. Language control is generally accurate and flexible with only occasional lapses.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

TR Task Response

7.0

The response addresses both questions directly, presents a clear position that the trend is negative, and supports its ideas with explanation and a relevant Machu Picchu example, though some points are asserted rather than fully extended.

CC Coherence and Cohesion

7.0

Ideas progress logically through clear paragraphs with appropriate linking devices, although some sentences repeat earlier points rather than advancing the argument, making progression occasionally mechanical.

LR Lexical Resource

7.0

Vocabulary is flexible and generally precise for the topic, with terms such as 'curating an online persona', 'immersion', and 'environmental degradation', though occasional repetition of phrases like 'appreciating and experiencing' shows limited variation.

GRA Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0

A good range of sentence structures, including complex and compound forms, is used with generally accurate control, with only minor errors such as slightly awkward parallel phrasing that do not impede communication.