Staying with One Organisation vs Changing Jobs

Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Many people argue that people prefer to work in one company all their whole lifetime of employment and this is a better option for employees. However, another group of people would prefer to work for as many as they could work to get diverse kind of experience. I would advocate the latter view for the following three main reasons. First, we need to build confidence with a variety of work experiences at our majored field. Second, we need to give us the opportunity to deal with bigger and new challenges. Finally, we need to be familiar with all types of industries to improve our knowledge and scope of learning.

First of all, as I mentioned before, we should build confidence with through facing different difficulties. If you work for only one organisation during all your lifetime, it becomes boring and monotonous and you could not challenge yourself on different occasions. Your work will become easier for you and you will not explore your hidden advantages to . Thus if you just adapt to your current work, you won’t be able to build your confidence. Therefore, you need to work with several companies with different responsibilities to improve and experience along with confidence.

Secondly, we need to give us the opportunity to pursue bigger challenges. It is considered that there must be bigger and new chances to expand your view in the new environment. You can meet a wide range of people who came from different backgrounds. Therefore, you can learn many things to develop and inspire your mind from them. After that, it is more open to thinking wider and further to pursue bigger challenges. So you should and always bring freshness into your knowledge and experience every single day. I can say that if you have to in another company you should grab it. You never know what potentials are waiting for you!

Finally, we to increase our skill and knowledge . Because there are so many products and works need to familiar. If you want to promote or develop yourself efficiently you should have optimal knowledge about all of them. For instance, if you are a , there are diverse kinds of products available in the market , consumer goods, foods, clothes, automobiles and others. All products that I mentioned need marketing; however, they all have their own specific features and that means they have different customers and market. Therefore, you need to familiar with at your field to promote and accomplish your mission.

To conclude, we would prefer to work for different companies that could to build confidence as well as give us the opportunity to pursue bigger challenges and familiar with diverse kind of industries.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response presents a clear opinion with a logical three-reason structure and sufficient length, which is its strongest aspect. The main limitation is that the opposing view is acknowledged but never genuinely developed, and recurring grammatical and word-choice errors weaken precision throughout.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.0

The position is clearly stated and supported with three developed reasons and an example, but the view favouring lifelong employment in one organisation is only mentioned and never genuinely examined, leaving the discussion uneven.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

There is a clear overall progression with paragraph-level organisation and linking devices, though cohesion is somewhat mechanical and reliant on repeated connectors such as 'therefore' and 'thus'.

Lexical Resource

6.0

Vocabulary is adequate for the topic with some attempts at less common items like 'monotonous' and 'diverse', but imprecise collocations such as 'build confidence with' and 'marketing people' recur.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.5

A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but frequent errors, including 'we need to give us the opportunity', 'we need to familiar with', and inconsistent plurals, reduce accuracy and at times obscure meaning.