Sample response & feedback

Sharing Information in Research and Business

Question

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business, and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Annotated response

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It is undeniable that sharing knowledge aids us in making rapid advances in technology, research, and industry. Some people believe that information is crucial and sharing it might lead to and create a dispute about ownership. I feel it is to share knowledge rather than keep it hidden. In the following paragraphs, I shall discuss both sides of the argument and elaborate on my viewpoint.

On the one hand, if we exchange data, we can make faster progress in scientific research and teaching. to assist people of all backgrounds, affluent or poor, to expand their knowledge and . The basic rationale for this notion is that when more individuals have access to information, research or commercial solutions will improve owing to frequent feedback. We all have limited capacity and resources to devote to any meaningful research, but when the exchange becomes open.

On the other hand, some organizations aim to keep details hidden because they believe it is necessary. They feel that they should reap the rewards because they have committed resources to research in a given area. To remain ahead of the competition and avoid patent issues, firms also keep information about corporate finances and confidential. Sharing this knowledge might cost the organization a lot of money and take away its competitive advantage.

To summarize, sharing knowledge enables us to develop mature and long-lasting solutions, and any concerns about are unfounded.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The response has a clear structure and generally varied language that communicates both views without difficulty. Its main limitation is the development and evaluation of those views: financial risks are identified without a detailed causal example, and the conclusion does not explain why the benefits justify the writer’s preference. The reference to “not doing so” also makes the final judgement unclear.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

TR Task Response

6.5

Both views are addressed and the introduction clearly favours sharing. The financial-risk argument needs fuller explanation, and the conclusion leaves the competing concerns unresolved while using an unclear reference to “not doing so”.

CC Coherence and Cohesion

6.5

The response follows a logical paragraph progression with workable cohesive devices, though linking is at times mechanical and the concluding summary oversimplifies the argument.

LR Lexical Resource

7.0

Vocabulary is reasonably varied and precise, including items such as 'competitive advantage' and 'patent issues,' with only occasional imprecise or awkward collocations.

GRA Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0

A range of complex structures is used with generally good control, and errors are minor and rarely impede meaning.