Payment from a job is one of the essential aspects for people to consider but it is not the only reason people take a new job or continue the existing one. I personally believe that there are other important considerations while choosing a job. Without any doubt, salary is essential in order for people to survive and a great proportion of people rely on the money they get from their jobs. Most of the job-holders pay for their housing, utility bills, food, treatment, travel, education and so on from the money they get from their employers. It is evident that if employers stop paying the employees, there would be virtually no one left to work in a company. Teaching, sports, painting, politics and research are considered to be professions where passion is more important than money. However, if there is no money at all, anyone would pursue these careers. However, money is not the most important concern for someone to choose a job and there are other important considerations to start and continue a job. Passion and , for instance, drive most of the people to work. For instance, many established artists, actors, writers and scientists who have already amassed a great fortune would have stopped working if the sole purpose of working would have been the money. From my personal experience, I can say that while choosing a job people most of the time consider a job they would enjoy rather than the money they would earn from it. Other important aspects, like the job security, career prospect, work environment, relationship with the colleagues and bosses are all Personally, I would like to have a job that suits my educational background, let me learn and implement my ideas, have a great working environment and then I would consider the money I will get for the job. To conclude, salary is an important aspect for picking a job but other factors in combination play more vital roles and have more significance than the money.
Salary as the Main Factor When Choosing a Job
When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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Overall assessment
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response maintains a clear disagreement and explains both the necessity of income and the importance of other job factors. Its relevant reasoning is a strength, but the entire essay appears as one continuous block, obscuring the argument's stages. Repeated linking phrases and occasional relative-clause and conditional errors further reduce precision.
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Task Response
7.0The position is clear and maintained throughout, all parts of the question are addressed, and main ideas are developed with relevant explanation and examples, though support is sometimes general rather than extended.
Coherence and Cohesion
5.5There is an understandable sequence from financial necessity to other priorities and a conclusion, but the exact response is one continuous block. Missing paragraph boundaries and repeated For instance and However weaken the organisation of otherwise relevant ideas.
Lexical Resource
7.0There is a good range of topic-related vocabulary such as 'job security', 'career prospect', and 'amassed a great fortune', used with reasonable flexibility, though some phrasing is imprecise or repetitive.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
7.0A variety of complex structures, including conditionals and relative clauses, is used with generally good control, marred by occasional errors such as 'let me learn' and awkward conditional formations that do not impede meaning.
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