Salary as the Main Factor When Choosing a Job

When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It has been proven that salary has been one of the important factors when people are looking for a job but undeniably, different people have various opinions about their favourite job which are , their characters, expectation, qualification and the economic situation.

In fact, there is an acute difference between aged employees and fresh graduates to find their desired jobs. , the youths consider work experience and want to enhance their abilities when they are choosing a job. While considerably ages and experienced people are looking for the better salary as they have obtained enough .

Also, the economic situation is another important factor when people are choosing their jobs. Put another way, some people prefer to have a job with a lower wage while the country is experiencing the shortage of work. For example, these days some European countries such as Greece or Spain are struggling with the bad economic situation and there are lots of unemployed people living there. So these people just want a job no matter how much the salary is. And the last parameter is related to people’s characters. It denotes that people have various requests from their jobs and it is not possible to write a prescription for all of the people on this matter. For instance, some find the work environment as the most important factor of a job, to the quality of relations between colleagues and some just are interested in the figure of the salary.

I think, therefore, satisfaction in a job is such a sophisticated issue and it is not logical to believe that the salary is the most important parameter for a good job. Perhaps because of this reason, lots of researches have been conducted to find the best job elements to satisfy employees.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.5

The response presents a clear disagreement with the statement and supports it with relevant factors such as age, economic conditions, and personal character, which is its strongest aspect. The main limitation is uneven development of ideas and recurring grammatical inaccuracy that slightly blurs meaning at points.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.5

The response addresses the task with a clear position against salary being the most important consideration and supports it with several relevant factors, though some ideas remain underdeveloped and the conclusion introduces new material rather than consolidating the argument.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.5

Ideas are arranged in a generally logical order with cohesive devices such as 'In fact', 'Put another way', and 'therefore', but paragraph boundaries and linking are occasionally mechanical, and some progression within paragraphs is loose.

Lexical Resource

6.5

Topic vocabulary provides adequate range, including experience, qualifications and economic conditions. Expressions such as 'ages and experienced people' and 'the figure of the salary' lack precision. The prescription metaphor is understandable; the more useful priority is accurate word forms and natural job-related collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

Simple and complex sentences are attempted, but the detached While clause is a fragment, people’ has an incorrect possessive form, and 'directly depended on' needs a suitable adjective or verb construction. 'Some just are interested' is grammatically possible and is not an agreement or tense error.