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Free University Education for All Students

Question

Some People Think that everyone has the right to have access to university education and that the Government should make it free for all students no matter what financial Backgroud They have. to extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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Education is a very important part of everyone’s life. Nowadays it is essential for everyone to get to become successful in life. Some people think that all people have the right to get a free University education and their financial background doesn’t matter for their study . In my honest opinion, I agree with this statement to a larger extent, and in some further, in further paragraphs, I will Express my opinion with logical facts and points.

First of all, is the basic need of . After completing school, higher education, like University education, played a very significant role to make a successful career. Many people are not able to get this education because of , and for that reason, they can’t get . University education for everyone by the government so people can easily study without any hesitation while studying. So they can easily concentrate on and become successful in their life. , so many Western countries and Arab countries such as Germany, Europe, Dubai, Israel education free for the people of their country; because of that, of people of that country is higher than others.

Moreover, if the person gets higher University education and they get a high paid job, which is good for both country and the person, For example, the person gets a job in a multinational company, so it increases the economy of the country by spending money in their own country, and it fills up the cost of their free education which was given by the government as well, and a person can also happily live their life by earning handsome money.

On the other hand, giving free education to everyone is hard for the government. It takes lots of money to make University education free, of course for everyone, and it’s not possible for some poor countries . Moreover, if students get free education, then they can’t study in a good manner, and they don’t take education .

In the end, I would like to conclude by saying that University education plays a major role in one’s life, should take the step to make University education free for everyone.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response takes a broadly supportive position on free university education and organises relevant access, economic and affordability arguments into recognisable paragraphs. Its strongest feature is this clear overall plan. However, the national example and economic causal claims need more careful support, and the conclusion loses the earlier qualification. Recurrent grammatical and word-choice errors also make several passages difficult to follow.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

TR Task Response

6.0

The response states broad agreement and offers relevant access, earnings and budget arguments. Development is uneven: the national example is imprecise, causal claims need support, and the conclusion drops the qualification introduced earlier.

CC Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

Paragraphing is logical with basic linking devices used effectively, but cohesion is sometimes mechanical and transitions such as 'As an epitome of me' disrupt the flow of ideas.

LR Lexical Resource

5.5

Vocabulary is generally adequate for the topic with some natural expressions like 'financial background' and 'high-paid jobs', but imprecise or odd word choices such as 'worry about fish' and 'As an epitome of me' limit range and accuracy.

GRA Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.5

A mix of simple and complex sentence forms is attempted, yet frequent errors in agreement, tense, and article use, such as 'University education should make free of costs', reduce overall grammatical accuracy and sometimes obscure meaning.