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Free University Education for All Students

Question

Some People Think that everyone has the right to have access to university education and that the Government should make it free for all students no matter what financial Backgroud They have. to extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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Education is the basic right of every human being. Education creates empowerment and makes capable of . Today we will discuss the importance of education and government policies that shall mandate its access to each human being. As we say that education is priceless, I agree that education up to the university level irrespective of caste, creed and financial status of the family.

To begin with, education is the paramount need of every human being. It evolves the person and provides knowledge to synchronize with changing world and lifestyle. The percentage of educated people in a country in the list of powerful nations. Education brings innovation, which eventually drives the growth of the country and attracts foreign investment. Availability of be ensured by the government in all cities and far-flung areas. In fact, it shall be freely up to the university level .

, education enables a person to know their rights, which makes them , especially in the modern era, where the world is rapidly changing, and technology has . It provides them with enough understanding to make the right selection when required in cases such as voting for government positions. Uneducated people are the prey of politicians and can be fooled easily by them. Uneducated people can be easily divided in the name of caste and religion, which is not good for any country. An educated person understands the motive behind these tactics and stays away from all these .

To conclude this, I strongly agree that access to education up to the university level shall be provided free to ensure prosperity and development of the nation and society.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.5

The response presents a clear, consistent position with logical progression across well-organized paragraphs, and it shows a reasonable range of vocabulary. Its main limitation is that supporting ideas remain somewhat general and repetitive, with underdeveloped examples and occasional awkward collocations or grammatical slips that slightly blur meaning.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

TR Task Response

6.5

The essay addresses the question directly with a clear, consistently maintained position and relevant main ideas, though the arguments are developed in a general way with limited concrete support and some repetitive elaboration.

CC Coherence and Cohesion

6.5

The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion, but cohesive devices such as 'Further to add above' are at times mechanical and referencing within sentences occasionally loses clarity.

LR Lexical Resource

6.5

Vocabulary is adequate for the task, with attempts at less common items such as “paramount”, “infiltrated” and “far-flung”. However, “evolves the person”, “tantrums” and the reversed meaning of “smart enough to get fooled” reduce precision.

GRA Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.5

A mix of simple and complex sentence forms is used with generally clear meaning. Article use and number choices need attention, as in “changing world” and “people’s personal life”, while the long opening sentence of the civic argument is difficult to follow.