Reasons and Solutions for Buying Too Many Clothes

In some parts of the world, people buy far too many clothes. What are the reasons for this? How can people be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy?

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In ancient times, humans produced fabric to shield them from cold weather and insects. As advanced, fabric became one of the across the world. evolved and now people buy many clothes even though they don’t need them. the and possible .

There are a few some people buy too many clothes. We live in a digital world and some people seek validation online. So, they purchase to post on their social media. Some people have a shopping addiction. Such people go on a shopping spree without giving it a second thought and buy whatever they think is good for them. , like many celebrities, have many designer dresses, even for a small occasion, fearing if they . Due to these reasons and many more, clothing is . It has become a fashion industry.

One thing we, as a society, can do is to create awareness campaigns for social media with the help of which will attract a wider audience to of over cultivation of cotton and bamboo plants which use too much water and cause soil erosion. can include a subject so that students get to know early about the wastage of resources on fabric production. Government should run TV ads to make the people the unused/rarely used clothes generally and additional funds need to be arranged to safely recycle yearly. But most importantly, people should in their shopping habits.

In conclusion, it is a real problem that some people buy many clothes. However, the responsibility lies with adults to minimize the purchase of unnecessary clothes and set an example for their children and .

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The response addresses both questions with relevant reasons for buying clothes and a range of persuasion measures. Its clearest strength is the organisation into causes and solutions. Awkward word choices and repeated problems with articles, plural forms and prepositions reduce precision, particularly in the longer sentences explaining proposed solutions.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

7.0

The response answers both questions with a clear purpose, develops each main idea with relevant explanation and examples, and reaches a clear conclusion, though some ideas remain slightly general.

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0

Ideas are logically organised into clear paragraphs with coherent progression, although linking is at times mechanical and transitions occasionally feel abrupt.

Lexical Resource

6.0

The response uses an adequate range of topic-related vocabulary, but frequent imprecise or awkward expressions such as 'high brand apparels', 'nature conservative groups', and 'effective causes' limit precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0

The response attempts a range of sentence structures, including extended explanations with subordinate clauses. Accuracy is uneven: article and plural errors recur, as in 'one of the most traded commodity', alongside incorrect preposition choices such as 'reasons on why' and 'aware on how'. The main ideas remain understandable.