Reasons and Solutions for Buying Too Many Clothes

In some parts of the world, people buy far too many clothes. What are the reasons for this? How can people be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy?

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The issue of purchasing plenty of clothes has attracted considerable attention in recent years. This essay will explain why this trend occurs and evaluate the possible solutions to make people .

There are several reasons why individuals . The main reason is that people always compare themselves while wearing new clothes . So, they can show others . Furthermore, is the reason to get more and more clothes . For example, people want to have , just to show .

To not let this happen, a government can impose a tax on to . The more expensive , the less people will tend to buy. For example, a person will only buy necessary clothes they want because they will not be able to afford such costly clothes. Moreover, that it requires more resources and natural materials like cotton to make clothes. Thus, if they for their daily life, it will be beneficial for .

In conclusion, buying more clothes occurs mainly , . However, it can be reduced by having more taxes on the clothing, about how these clothes are made .

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the question with relevant reasons and two plausible solutions, showing adequate task coverage. Its main limitation is imprecise vocabulary and recurring grammatical errors that occasionally obscure meaning, along with somewhat mechanical organization. Ideas are relevant but underdeveloped, particularly in the examples provided.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.0

Both questions are addressed with a relevant main reason and two solutions, but ideas and examples remain underdeveloped and are expressed with some inaccuracy.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

The essay has a clear overall structure and uses basic cohesive devices, though progression within paragraphs is sometimes mechanical and links are loosely applied.

Lexical Resource

5.5

Vocabulary is adequate for the topic but limited, with noticeable errors in word choice and formation such as 'fationable attires', 'colth', and 'showoff people'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.5

A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, and sentence construction reduce clarity at times.