Reasons and Solutions for Buying Too Many Clothes

In some parts of the world, people buy far too many clothes. What are the reasons for this? How can people be persuaded to reduce the number of clothes they buy?

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People all around the world want to dress nicely. However, in recent years more clothes than they need.

There are a couple of the rise of overconsumption. One of them is . The industry being about . In stores we can see a lot of cheap they will not last for long. less affordable for customers. Secondly, today social media creates which a lot of people try to follow. For example, fans are trying to look like their favourite idols while , which can change every day.

Overconsumption is dangerous for the environment. to reduce the number of clothes which people buy. can play a big role in it by like "buy 2 get 1 for free". That action will help people decide to buy instead of trying to buy anything just to a promotion. Moreover, social media can also play a big role in people to think carefully another item. the idea of and in mental health (less stressed about what to wear and less anxious about following fashion trends).

Buying too many clothes is a big problem for the environment and it is time to find reasons and .

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response addresses both questions with a clear position and relevant ideas, and its strongest aspect is the concrete solution section linking shops and social media to persuasion. The main limitation is recurring vocabulary and grammar errors that occasionally blur meaning, plus ideas that remain somewhat briefly developed.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.0

The response addresses both parts of the question with a relevant position and some supporting examples, though ideas are developed only partially and the conclusion is thin.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs with basic cohesive devices, but progression is sometimes mechanical and some links between ideas are unclear.

Lexical Resource

6.0

Vocabulary is adequate for the topic with attempts at less common items, but misspellings and word-choice errors such as 'tendention', 'coping' and 'adviticements' recur and occasionally obscure meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

A mix of simple and complex structures is used with some flexibility, yet frequent errors in articles, prepositions and word forms reduce overall accuracy without fully blocking communication.