Some people believe that arts education is as significant as the study of other subjects, especially for primary students. I completely agree with this viewpoint because some educational content could be better illustrated , and the study of arts is which fosters of young students. The arts could deliver information to students, especially to those attending primary schools, in a way that words in textbooks sometimes cannot. Children may become bored and tired if they have to read or listen to too much educational content in textbooks. A colorful painting or a catchy song, on the other hand, can be much more appealing and thus more effective in conveying information to these children. For example, the Ghen Covy song has been taught at most schools in Vietnam and has become one of children’s favorite songs. This song has effectively highlighted the importance of hand washing as a means of disease prevention, and has made it easier for many children to remember every step of hand sanitization and . Furthermore, the study of arts is one factor that contributes to of young students. While academic subjects focus on children’s cognitive development, children to develop their social-emotional skills. By singing a song or drawing a picture, these children are likely to express their feelings and nurture their sense of community. For example, thousands of Vietnamese children, who were encouraged by their teaching staff, drew pictures of sunflowers to deliver messages of love and support for pediatric cancer patients. In conclusion, the arts can sometimes be better at transmitting knowledge than textbooks, and the provision of both academic and arts education is necessary for an all-rounded growth of young students. I firmly believe that the study of arts should never be underestimated in any .
Sample response & feedback
Arts Education in Primary Schools
Question
Some say that music, art and drama are as important as other school subjects, especially at the primary level. Do you agree or disagree?
Annotated response
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Overall assessment
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response maintains a clear agreement and develops two relevant reasons with concrete examples of songs and drawings. Language is generally clear and varied, despite some awkward collocations and a subject–verb agreement error. The main opportunity is to connect the examples more explicitly to the equal importance of arts subjects, rather than only showing that artistic activities can convey information or support children emotionally.
IELTS criteria
How each score was decided
TR Task Response
7.0The position is clear and consistent throughout, both main ideas are relevant and supported with specific examples, though development is somewhat extended rather than thorough.
CC Coherence and Cohesion
7.0Ideas progress logically through an introduction, two main supporting sections and a conclusion. Contrast and example markers generally guide the reader clearly, although some links between the activities described and the claimed developmental benefits could be more explicit.
LR Lexical Resource
7.0Vocabulary conveys educational ideas with reasonable flexibility, including “disease prevention” and “nurture their sense of community”. Some combinations are less natural or precise, including “all-rounded growth” and “one key consideration” for studying the arts.
GRA Grammatical Range and Accuracy
7.0A variety of complex structures, including relative clauses and conditionals, is used with good control, with only minor errors such as 'arts education help'.