Whether Women Make Better Parents Than Men

Many people believe that women make better parents than men and that is why they have the greater role in raising children in most societies. Others claim that men are just as good as women at parenting. Write an essay expressing your point of view.

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Parenting is an extremely important factor for the proper upbringing of a child. While some people are of the opinion that women make better parents, others think that men can also be effective in parenting. I believe that there cannot be conclusions drawn in a generic sense relating to the gender – Men or Women. What matters most is the one who has the qualities of being a good parent; this can be either a male or female.

of having more patience, tend to handle children better during their infancy when patience is an important factor. Ensuring a balanced and nutritious diet for a child is again done better by women. For example, women are in a better position to understand what a child needs to take in the lunchbox . Further, studies have indicated that , values and ethics into a child during their growing up years is done better by mothers.

Men's contribution to a child's development is found to be more effective when it comes to . This becomes important as the child's time management becomes a key to his overall behavioural traits and personality. For example, ensuring the child wakes up in time, spends the right amount of time on and outdoor games can be better enforced by a father. Studies also indicate that children who get addicted to one particular activity, for example, say computer games, tend to grow up as loners and whose ability to interact socially becomes limited. Men tend to have better ability to control these activities in growing children.

To conclude, it will be incorrect to draw a general inference that women make better parents than men. No two individuals are the same and everyone possesses their unique strengths. If that strength coincides with the quality required for effective parenting, they could make good parents regardless of whether they are men or women.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The strongest aspect is the clear, consistently maintained position that parenting quality depends on individual strengths rather than gender, developed through distinct paragraphs on each side. The main limitation is that supporting evidence relies on generalized claims and vague references to studies, and some word choices are imprecise.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

7.0

The response addresses all parts of the task, presents a clear and consistent position that parenting ability is individual rather than gender-based, and develops main ideas with explanations and examples, though some support is generalized and asserted rather than fully substantiated.

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0

Ideas are logically organized into a clear introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, with a range of cohesive devices used naturally and progression generally easy to follow.

Lexical Resource

6.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate and sometimes flexible, but there are noticeable imprecise or unnatural usages such as 'imbibing the morals' and 'take in the lunchbox' that slightly reduce precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0

A variety of complex structures is used with generally good control, though occasional awkward constructions such as 'there cannot be conclusions drawn' and relative clause errors are present without impeding communication.