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Instant Noodle Manufacturing Process

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The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Annotated response

8 correction notes

The provided diagram depicts the process by which instant noodles are produced. Overall, it can be seen that there are eight main steps in the process, beginning with the storage of flour in silos and concluding with the labeling and sealing of cups.

To commence the process, flour is transferred from a truck and stored in tower silos. Subsequently, it is introduced into a mixing machine where it is blended with water and oil. Upon completion of this phase, and then passed through a machine to be cut into strips.

At the subsequent stage, these dough strips are shaped into noodle discs, which are then subjected to cooking in oil and subsequently left to undergo a drying process. After that, the dried noodle discs, together with vegetables and spices, are packed into cups. The process culminates with the labeling and sealing of these cups.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.5

The response covers all eight numbered stages in the correct sequence and provides a clear overview of the start and end points. Passive structures and precise process vocabulary communicate the main operations effectively. Some expressions, such as “subjected to cooking” and “left to undergo a drying process”, are unnecessarily elaborate. Grouping the intermediate stages in the overview would make the overall transformation easier to grasp.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

TA Task Achievement

7.5

The response covers the eight numbered stages in sequence and provides a clear overview of the start and end points. A brief grouping of dough preparation, cooking and drying, and packaging would make the overall transformation more explicit; the existing detail is relevant to this process diagram.

CC Coherence and Cohesion

7.5

The response is logically organised in clear paragraphs with a consistent range of sequencing devices such as to commence, subsequently, upon completion of this phase and the process culminates, giving smooth and natural progression throughout.

LR Lexical Resource

7.5

There is a good range of process-related vocabulary, including transferred, blended, resultant mixture, shaped into noodle discs and subjected to cooking, used with generally precise and natural control and only rare awkwardness such as left to undergo a drying process.

GRA Grammatical Range and Accuracy

8.0

The response demonstrates wide flexibility with accurate use of passive forms, participle clauses and complex structures, and errors are rare and do not impede communication.

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