The response covers all seven stages and gives an overview. Some relationships are imprecise: winds are said to generate moist air, and rainfall is described as heavy without a stated intensity. The thousands-of-kilometres scale is present in the diagram, but the essay should relate it to geographical locations rather than to moist and dry air.
6.0The progression of stages is broadly clear with sequencing devices like 'subsequently' and 'following this', but cohesion is mechanical, reference is sometimes unclear, and sentences repeat 'process' and 'subsequent' awkwardly.
6.0The response uses adequate topic-related vocabulary such as 'windward side', 'leeward side', and 'moisture', but frequent spelling errors like 'porcess', 'begining', 'swirched', and 'kilometeres' and imprecise word choices reduce its range and accuracy.
6.0A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, yet errors are frequent, including 'winds including moisture approach coast', 'rised become cool', and 'go to downwards', which sometimes obscure meaning.
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