家庭1968年与2018年的每周开支

Family Weekly Spending in 1968 and 2018

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

下面的图表给出了某国家庭在1968年和2018年如何支配其每周收入的信息。

请选择并报告主要特征来概括信息,并在相关之处进行比较。

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要点:家庭1968年与2018年的每周开支

为什么这是柱状图 ,要求你比较最重要的几个类别。

所以我们把要点分为概述(最大的差异或规律)和要点(值得描述的数据和对比)。

概述

2个要点

要点

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估算分数5.0/ 9

总体评价

The response covers most categories and attempts an overview, which is its strongest aspect, but the data reporting is often unclear and several figures and categories are confused or unsupported by the chart. Language control is weak throughout, with frequent grammatical breakdowns and imprecise wording that obscures meaning.

TA

任务完成情况

The response attempts an overview and covers several categories with some accurate figures (e.g. food falling from 35% to about half), but category labels and data are frequently confused or garbled, such as the unclear housing reference, the misreported fuel and power change, and the incoherent sentence about personal goods and transport.

5.0
CC

连贯与衔接

There is a visible overall structure with an introduction, overview, and detail paragraphs, but progression within paragraphs is hard to follow because referents like 'it', 'its utilization of it', and 'the consumption of income' do not clearly link to categories.

5.5
LR

词汇丰富度

Vocabulary shows some range of change-related language, but there are frequent imprecise or inappropriate items such as 'weekly salary consumed', 'alternative eight things', and 'usage of had started', which reduce clarity.

5.0
GRA

语法多样性与准确性

Sentence structures are attempted with some complex forms, but errors are frequent and sometimes impede meaning, including 'its utilization of it', 'the usage of had started by8%for leisure', and missing or misplaced articles and prepositions.

5.0

下一步改进重点

Accurately match each category with its correct figures for both years and proofread to eliminate grammatical errors that obscure the data.

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