Teachers vs Parents Influence on Child Development

Once children start school, teachers have more influence on their intellectual and social development than parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Annotated response

1 correction note

Showing 1 correction note.

School children are indeed at an impressionable age, and two strong influences on their intelligence and social development are teachers and parents. While I accept that teachers may have more influence on their pupils’ intelligence, I would argue that parents probably exert a greater influence on the social development of their children.

In terms of encouraging the intellectual development and stimulating the intelligence of school children, I believe that teachers play a major role. While not all teachers can inspire their students, they are trained to impart their knowledge of their subject areas in challenging and imaginative ways. For example, some students owe their lifelong love of a subject to dedicated teachers who taught this discipline in secondary school. Of course, at home, parents may also reinforce this passion by encouraging study habits during the formative years of their children. Such support is vital for academic achievement.

From the perspective of social development, I think that parents are mainly responsible for guiding their children. Firstly, they spend far more time with their children than any individual teacher can do. They can therefore monitor the activities of children outside school hours, at weekends, and during holidays. Secondly, parents can provide role models in a whole range of situations. These might include respecting elders, choosing friends, or proper behavior in public when eating out in restaurants.

In conclusion, although teachers probably have a greater effect in stimulating the intelligence of school children, parental influences on the development of children are stronger in social situations.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 8.0

The response presents a clear, nuanced position that distinguishes intellectual from social development and develops both sides with relevant explanation and examples. Its main limitation is a somewhat safe, formulaic structure and occasional reliance on generic phrasing rather than fully extended support.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

8.0

The response directly addresses the question with a clearly stated qualified position, develops both main ideas fully, and supports them with relevant explanation and examples throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion

8.0

Ideas are logically organised into well-sequenced paragraphs with effective referencing and a range of cohesive devices used naturally, with no noticeable strain on progression.

Lexical Resource

8.0

Vocabulary is flexible and precise, including natural collocations such as 'impressionable age', 'exert a greater influence', and 'formative years', with only very occasional generic phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

8.0

A wide range of structures, including complex concession and relative clauses, is used with flexibility and accuracy, and errors are rare and minor.