Researching Family History and Genealogy

In some parts of the world, it is becoming increasingly popular to try to find out the history of someone’s family. Why do you think people do this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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I definitely agree that finding the origin of a family is truly crucial . Furthermore, I will elaborate the reasons through this essay.

The first reason is that people tend to clarify and identify the origin of their family to detect the characteristics of every member psychologically and biologically. , we are claimed to have other family members as well as face the problems. Moreover, biologically, it is clear that we get the character genetically from parents, then by observing and identifying this biological feature we are able to understand why we possess a certain character and how to change the character in future for the next offspring.

The second reason is that we face many criminal cases nowadays in terms of adopting children for those children in the future when they are registered in migration office as well as when they are sent to the school. This condition gets some people to identify the history of the family to avoid the constraints in every place where they are. For example, they absolutely need as well as their valid address in making a family card. They then try to find out some information from people around them.

On the other hand, there are some people who believe that this action is merely a . There is no advantage to think more about the past or the history of a family. However, every person has his/her own pride to identify the characteristics of family members. We cannot deny that they are all memorable to be memorised forever. The most important thing is that we must respect the way people love their family.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response offers a relevant explanation of why people research family history, supported by psychological and administrative examples, which is its strongest aspect. The main limitation is the weak and indirect handling of the positive-or-negative question, where the counterargument is dismissed rather than analysed and the final paragraph drifts from the task.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

5.5

The response addresses why people investigate family history with relevant, developed ideas, but the positive-or-negative question is answered only indirectly and the concluding paragraph addresses a counterargument rather than giving a clear overall judgement.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

Ideas are arranged in clear paragraphs with logical links within sections, though some connections are mechanical and the progression weakens when the counterargument is introduced and only partially resolved.

Lexical Resource

6.0

Vocabulary is adequate for the topic, including expressions such as "unclear identity" and "biological feature". However, imprecise and repetitive phrasing such as "memorable to be memorised" weakens the precision of some explanations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but errors in articles and noun phrases recur. Examples include the missing "of" in "a waste the time" and the malformed possessive phrase "the data of parent birth date". Meaning remains mostly clear despite these inaccuracies.