Researching Family History and Genealogy

In some parts of the world, it is becoming increasingly popular to try to find out the history of someone’s family. Why do you think people do this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Recently, in most countries, the history of people's life, especially their family backgrounds. This trend can lead to several benefits for many aspects such as , or collecting data of social ranges in the countries for further uses, or even preserving historical backgrounds among the nations. This essay, as my point of view lead to, will elaborate more about the reasons people doing this as I believe that this trend is a good improvement.

Firstly, how a family educates their children influences the way of thinking of the children in some ways. Besides, the beliefs the family holds and teaches the children will always be with the children. Thus the first school for the children is the house they live in. An employee with so scheduled activities can be related to . Relating to this, corporations take this indicator, the family backgrounds, as one of the considerations to select the applicants for appropriate positions.

Secondly, historians recognise this as an academic interest. They collect perspectives of social, economy, and also culture from the society. They use this as the database to preserve the historical background to remind the young generations about their own personal as well as to which are proper for the condition of the group of families inside the country for the government. , there will be massive positive outcomes for both individuals and governments to deal with severe problems in society because the database includes beliefs, values, religions, and other from the society.

To sum up, having considered all views above, I believe the historic background of families in the society.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the question and maintains a clear positive stance, supported by two extended reasons about employers and historians. The main limitation is frequent awkward and inaccurate phrasing that blurs the meaning of several ideas, along with ideas that are under-explained or debatable rather than convincingly developed.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.0

The response answers both questions with a clear position and relevant main ideas, but the ideas are unevenly developed and the employer argument is questionable and imprecisely explained.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

Paragraphing and sequencing are broadly logical with linking devices such as firstly and secondly, though referencing and cohesion are sometimes mechanical and the progression within sentences is hard to follow.

Lexical Resource

6.0

There is adequate range of vocabulary for the topic, but repeated awkward collocations and imprecise word choices, such as social ranges and this trend is a good improvement, reduce precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

Simple and complex structures are attempted, but frequent errors and awkward constructions strain readability. Examples include the repeated infinitive marker in "to not to forget" and the incorrect dummy subject in "there will always be great to find out". The intended meaning is usually recoverable.