Nowadays, it can be seen that a large number of specialists from developing countries are moving abroad to find a better life somewhere else. This occurrence is caused by the absence of sufficient salaries and unsatisfactory working conditions. Thus, poor countries have a constant lack of professionals, namely physicians and to worsening education and health in this territory. In order to tackle this problem, the financial welfare and working conditions for these social groups should be improved. To begin with, the lack of specialists in the healthcare and education systems significantly worsens the situation in the country, because in this case, it is precisely the well-educated segment of the population that is leaving it. For instance, because the principal point is to prepare future generations and because without them, we would have a lost generation. As a result, this group of young people almost does not have any chance to and they would be their whole life. There are two effective solutions to cope with this problem. First of all, it is necessary to increase salaries for professionals. It goes without saying that this step can boost the desire of people to stay in their countries. Secondly, we can stop brain drain by improving the conditions of work. In this case, the government should consider increasing annual leave or lowering the retirement age to improve work-life balance. In , I believe that all people in the world look for a better life for a lot of specialists are leaving their poor countries to work in developed ones. However, if the governance of developing countries starts to take care of their professionals right now, brain drain can be prevented.
Brain Drain of Professionals to Developed Countries
An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation?
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Overall assessment
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response directly answers both parts of the question with a clear problem–solution structure and relevant, reasonably developed ideas supported by examples. Its main limitations are occasional mechanical linking, a truncated conclusion phrase, and somewhat formulaic language that keeps the writing short of higher-band flexibility.
IELTS criteria
How each score was decided
Task Response
7.0The essay addresses both the problems and the solutions clearly, maintains a relevant position throughout, and develops main ideas with explanation and examples, though development is sometimes thin, as in the generalized claim about a lost generation.
Coherence and Cohesion
6.5Progression is logical with clear paragraphing and workable cohesive devices, but linking is at times mechanical and a phrase such as 'In , I believe' shows a coherence lapse that slightly disrupts flow.
Lexical Resource
6.5Vocabulary is adequate for the task with some good items like brain drain and work-life balance, but reliance on formulaic phrases and occasional imprecise wording limit flexibility and precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
6.5A mix of structures is used with generally accurate complex sentences, yet errors such as faulty relative clauses and punctuation slips show control that is not yet consistently extended.