Brain Drain of Professionals to Developed Countries

An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation?

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The underdeveloped and the developing countries have always garnered notoriety for not providing an to the deserving talents owing to which people tend to fly towards the developed nations in order to stage their potential in a well-facilitated ambience. Further are the problems posed due to this scenario and the possible solutions to mitigate if not totally curb the process.

To begin with, there is an inclination of the people undergoing a recognition-deprivation and brain-drain due to overlooking the virtues of deserving and gifted citizens of the poor countries. There are a plethora of problems and drastic consequences of such cases. Healthcare professionals that are indispensable to the human race tend to emigrate to other better-providing countries. For instance, every seventh doctor in the USA is an Indian, the reason for that, as they say, is the circumventing attitude of the Indian government which then culminates in the paucity and lacuna of the health index of India as compared to the developed ones. In addition to that, teachers, who are the backbone of any nation and shape the foundation of the future of a nation, migrate and the developed nations due to better provisions of lifestyle there, again debilitating the baseline of a poor nation. Researchers, scientists and several others likewise, who know their worth and over that, who know they shall be promulgated and aggrandized if they settle in a better country, follow the very similar pattern when it comes to leaving their native nations in order to seek a better livelihood. Hence, making a poor country poorer and the advanced ones even more advanced.

The problem is as evident, very solemn to overlook anymore. It is high time that the poor nations who are on the verge of being more destitute owing to such malpractices start safeguarding their most prime resource, that is, human resources. Nations first of all have to diligently start managing the funds they get from the World Bank and the betterment of the amenities and facilities needed to propagate their talented assets and most importantly, start recognizing and rewarding their capabilities. There is a clear lack of research laboratories and due to that, the velocity with which researchers should move forth is somehow not able to match up. Hence, the establishment of the research and scientific appurtenances should be accelerated. Secondly, the primary driving force for migration, should be hiked, especially in the cases of teachers, doctors and scientists, etc. so that they are not their life frugally, of discontentment that in return, shackles their maximum output. Incentives and guerdoning the right and worthy individuals are yet other ways to promote in the people, inertia to move to another place.

In conclusion, there is a pervasive apprehension in everybody when it comes to leaving one’s homeland. It is only due to a detrimental cesspool that leads one to move to a new place. Therefore, if that issue is resolved, assuredly people won’t look to settle somewhere else in the search of rewards.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.5

The essay addresses both problems and solutions, with substantial relevant discussion. However, several inaccurate or unclear expressions obscure the ideas, particularly the description of professionals being "promulgated". Long sentences, an agreement error and a sentence fragment also reduce control. Rare vocabulary is not automatically wrong, but its meaning must fit the intended claim.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

7.0

The essay addresses both questions fully, presents developed main ideas about brain drain and a clear set of solutions, and supports them with a relevant example, though some argument development is verbose rather than sharply focused.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.5

Progression is broadly clear with logical paragraphing and linking devices, but cohesion is at times strained by long, convoluted sentences and slightly forced transitions such as 'Further are the problems posed'.

Lexical Resource

6.0

The response attempts a wide range of vocabulary, but expressions such as "anchoring rostrum", "they shall be promulgated" and "paucity and lacuna of the health index" obscure meaning. By contrast, "garnered notoriety" is valid, and the rare verb "guerdoning" does mean rewarding.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.5

There is a range of complex structures, but control is uneven. The fragment beginning "Hence, making a poor country poorer" lacks a main verb, while "the wages, which is" has an agreement problem. Long sentences also make several relationships harder to follow.