Brain Drain of Professionals to Developed Countries

An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation?

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Brain drain has been in existence for a long time. The numbers continued to increase steadily, and the situation has not reversed, which is why it has become a serious concern for developing countries now. Loss of skilled human resources will weaken the economy, which will lead to other problems like poverty, unemployment, social unrest, and in some extreme cases, create situations of war. Skill retention can be done by recognising and rewarding the meritorious lot, increasing the pay scale, and enabling research opportunities alongside work.

Poor countries will become poorer with the migration of skilled workers. The doctor to population ratio recommended by WHO is 1:1000. Underdeveloped countries will be unable to achieve this, and the death rate will continue to increase due to a lack of proper treatment. Many students will opt out of school due to the lack of good teachers. The country will fail to produce talented individuals due to the poor quality of education. This will lead to the mass production of unskilled human resources who may not help in improving the economy of the country. Poor economic conditions, coupled with unhealthy living, will exacerbate poverty, lead to unemployment and ultimately disintegrate the nation.

Skill retention can be done in several ways. Poor countries receive considerable foreign aid which could be channelised in positive ways. As a first step, the government should reward the deserving candidates with scholarships and increase facilities for research-oriented activities. Secondly, the pay scale should be increased for doctors and teachers, and the work environment should be made fair and transparent. People who perform well in their respective fields of study should be honoured with awards and incentives. The secret is to make the right people happy.

In conclusion, it is indeed a significant loss for the country to become deprived of its skilled people. But it should also be noted that they migrate because of a lack of opportunities and recognition. The government should step in and create an environment conducive to growth and development.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The response addresses the problems and solutions with clear paragraphs and relevant discussion of health care, education and professional incentives. Its main limitation is the strength of some unsupported causal claims, particularly the progression from migration to war or national disintegration. The attribution of a numerical ratio does not itself verify that supporting claim.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

7.0

The response addresses both questions directly with a clear overall position, well-developed problems and plausible solutions, though some causal claims, such as migration leading to war, are asserted rather than fully supported.

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0

Ideas progress logically across clear paragraphs with effective use of cohesive devices, although a few transitions between ideas are slightly abrupt and some chains of consequences are compressed.

Lexical Resource

7.0

Vocabulary is sufficiently wide and mostly precise, with natural collocations such as 'conducive to growth' and 'channelised in positive ways', and only occasional slightly awkward phrasing like 'the meritorious lot'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0

A range of complex sentences, relative clauses and passive constructions conveys the argument with generally good control. The shifts between past trends, present circumstances and possible future consequences do not themselves establish tense inconsistency or faulty subject-verb agreement.